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to put it simply, I want you
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to put it simply, I want you |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
I want to be your companion and walk hand in hand, your strength enveloping mine. Autumn leaves falling, scuffing feet and laughter, sharing nights, not finished by the dark. I want to be your confidant as you pen your deepest thoughts, as your heartaches bleed and finally break free. Your dreams, I keep as if my own. I want to smile as you smile and giggle with you at nothing at all. I want to be your lover and find the passions that move you to action. I want to be the softness that induces you to trust. I want to be the naughty that makes you come back for more. I want to please you. I want to share your breakfast and your dinner, I want you in the shower and in your bed and with soft steps to bring you coffee (I take mine black) Your strong arms, the legs that power your thrust, your lips of pleasure, these are the fuel of my desire no it is no secret, my love, and to put it very simply, I want you. ------------------ ©1999 Iloveit [This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 11-09-1999).] |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
simple indeed! nice poem, it shows what a huge part someone else plays in our hearts eh?  X ------------------ "We have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night" (Tombstone epitaph of two amateur astronomers) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
To put it simply.... absolutely excellent!!! *G* But I really must ask... Have you been reading my diary? You wrote my thoughts... more coherently than I could ever think them! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
x angel, yep, you said it perfect suthern *g* *hands suthern back her diary* lolol big hugs and thanks, I think coherant is a compliment isn't it? |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Lovely, lovely, lovely...... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh, I do believe suthern is mistaken, think it was my diary you were reading, or my mind if nothing else. What a beautiful expression of words |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
3 lovely's from pepper, that makes me smile thanksand reading hoot's mind....whew, that's a compliment ....good to see you back |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Oh to be desired in that way... ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
hmmmmm wow, RS you really made me think, I know I have read poems and thought the same thing, I wish someone would desire me like that, but never thought of it that the object of *my* desire was favored by it lol...thanks |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Iloveit, This one is a keeper in more then one way. It made me laugh it made me cry it made me wish even a little impish. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This poem was written to the luckiest man alive, whoever he is. Exquisite words,KD. If only more people felt that way and were confident enough to say them out loud. (sigh) |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
seymore, glad to help you feel impish lol, no really glad you enjoyed balladeer, this was written to an I wish man, in other words to the man I wish I had, but is not possible, so will follow your sigh with mine ...sigh |
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Aurora's Fire Junior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 28Oshawa, Ontario, Canada |
Very straightforward and loving, that'll get the man. I enjoyed very much. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Iloveit, I loved it. : ) |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
Aurora's Fire, I wish, unfortunately he will not ever read it.....sigh Munda, thanks |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ilove it ... and I truly do ! This is lovely. Hope the 'I Wish' man comes to life. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Emmy Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 194KY |
You put it simply and yet beautifully... I truly felt every word! ------------------ ________________________ Keep your face to the sun and you will never see the shadow -- Helen Keller ~~~Emmy~~~ |
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jenmarie Junior Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 27 |
i hope you find him and get all that you want |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is sooooooo beautiful! I enjoyed it very much! ------------------ Denise |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Beautiful Lovey ... I hope you'll find your Irish man ... yep, coherent is a compliment ! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
thanks all, really glad you enjoyed... and jtf....thank you and thanks for using your dictionary *g* to look up coherent |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Iloveit: How did I miss this????...It's beautiful, like you!.. and ROFL @ Irish ...*g* HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
thanks rainbow and I know me too ROFG@Irish man, I got about as much chance finding an Irish one as an I wish one lolol |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Actually, Lovey - I did read the poem... I am part Irish - but, alas, I am already taken. This was an excellent poem. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
thanks LJ good to see you, even if you are already taken |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This is excellent, you are graced with talent. Thanks for sharing. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ah yes - Keep It Simple Sweetheart..... |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
thanks lost dreamer, what a nice compliment thanks nan, I loved that KISS |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Lovey...I can be there in a few hours? I can scuff my boots, do "fa-la-las"...Ya know I posted that poem for you and Suthern (my two one and only's) that time?:::: Come to me Do not hesitate, I am not funky. Please be mine, Let our hearts entwingle, Like honeysucker Jump around me Scuff my boots Fingerpoke at me Skippy-toe by With owl-growls And "Fa-la-la's" Love with me All your grits As I love you. Love Poem Number 22 |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Hmmmmm, sweet Toe... and this one and only who loves you with all her grits cannot help but notice that you're rushing off to that other one and only... just cuz she writes purty pomes!!! LOL. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
But....but.....you're my one and only too yanno?....And, I'm always rushing yanno?...LOL |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well rush this way first!!! LOL. Maybe you won't find it necessary to move on to the 2nd O&O! LOL |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
well toe, in all sincerity, when a poem is entitled "love poem 22"...ummmm well, I think that speaks for itself ROFG big hugs to you both |
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