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suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


0 posted 11-09-1999 09:34 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

Clutching close my invitation
I enter with much trepidation.
I glance to where you're holding court...
Your laugh rings out, your friends cavort
With such glee.
I wonder why I came tonight -
Thoughts of arms holding me tight
Seem foolish even to this dreamer.
Your eyes are on that brazen schemer
Not on me.
I wish that I could get away
Before I have to hear you say
Your heart belongs to another.
I try to breathe, I almost smother
All alone.
But the dance continues as I cry
Whirls of color whisper by.
I gaze with longing at the door -
I must cross that endless floor
To get home.
© Copyright 1999 suthern - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 11-09-1999 09:37 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Suthern,
One fine piece of work, enjoyed the poem.
Iloveit
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2 posted 11-09-1999 09:40 AM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

suthern I love the way you write, you paint such a vivid picture, felt like I was standing there too.....great poem
X Angel
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3 posted 11-09-1999 09:40 AM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

Hmmph! What a meanie! Great poem
X

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Lost Dreamer
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4 posted 11-09-1999 09:42 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Very nice, I really enjoyed this one. You need to write more often so we can enjoy your talent.
Toerag
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5 posted 11-09-1999 09:48 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Yassee? I have to play hookie from class to read this! Lost Dreamer, I've been telling her and telling her to write....But nooooooo! As soon as I give up telling her to do things, the silly @$%%$ goes and does it? Wimmin!
Iloveit
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6 posted 11-09-1999 09:50 AM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

ROFG@Wimmin......lol ain't we sumpthin?

and yep suthern's the cream of the sumpthins
or something like that, its supposed to read as a compliment, but I got lost in the wording lol, you know I love you girl...and yep will agree with toe....WRITE MORE!
suthern
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7 posted 11-09-1999 09:51 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you all very much for your kind comments... I'd almost posted this one yesterday when I found it (it's an oldie that I was trying to avoid having to retype *G*)... but I'm so glad I didn't. I don't post that often, but as luck would have it, I've posted a poem and watched Open #1 freeze up, posted a poem and despaired as Open #2 cratered... I think I would have had to take it personally if I'd posted yesterday and closed down Open #3! LOL. Again, thanks...
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8 posted 11-09-1999 09:53 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Toerag: Well I keep giving you other offers, sweets... of all the things I'd like to do... Can ya blame me if writing isn't top on my list?? LOL.

Lovey: Watch it, gal... or you'll get sour cream! LOL
RainbowGirl
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9 posted 11-09-1999 10:07 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Well done my friend, excellent as always but what a fool he was...

HUSG

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Blondie
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10 posted 11-09-1999 10:22 AM       View Profile for Blondie   Email Blondie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Blondie

Wonderful piece here suthern, I really enjoyed it!
Pepper
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11 posted 11-09-1999 10:45 AM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

Suthern, I too enjoy your writing and like the others would like to see more
Great poem here....



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hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 11-09-1999 11:56 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nice

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suthern
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13 posted 11-09-1999 12:03 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you, ladies... I'm glad you liked!

RG: Nope... I'm the fool. *S*

Pepper: I could say the same about you! *G* Thanks!

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14 posted 11-09-1999 12:22 PM       View Profile for fatwah   Email fatwah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fatwah

very nice, i enjoyed this a lo.
ps. what has happened to watcher?
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15 posted 11-09-1999 02:38 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Suthern, this poem is very, very well written, rhyme, style, meter, the whole ball of wax.

You have to expect these things by tagging around that cavortin' Toerag, though. Such a heartless lug he is. I know for a fact he scotch tapes worms to the sidewalk just to watch birds get hernias!

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 11-09-1999).]
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16 posted 11-09-1999 02:43 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

'Deer: Say what??? Just a sec while I pick up my dentures. *G* I don't think I've ever had rhyme or meter complimented... (though some do like my style! LOL... Ooops... back to poetry! *G*)

And as soon as I finish ROFLMAO @ birdie hernias, you know you're in for a scolding for bad-mouthing that sweet Toe AGAIN! *G*
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17 posted 11-09-1999 05:50 PM       View Profile for Aurora's Fire   Email Aurora's Fire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aurora's Fire

My favourite lines "But the dance continues as I cry Whirls of color whisper by" very nice, but very sad.
Munda
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18 posted 11-09-1999 07:02 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

I like this a lot Suthern. : )
Saxoness
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19 posted 11-09-1999 09:24 PM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

ya ya, very sad, i was standin right beside ya....i was blended into the paper.

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I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

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Very well done, Suthern!

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Denise

Michael
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21 posted 11-10-1999 12:17 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Been on that endless floor myself, it's like you take a step and the room stretches out 3 or 4 feet in front of you. Very enjoyable poem, suthern.


Michael
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22 posted 11-10-1999 04:15 AM       View Profile for JTF   Email JTF   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JTF

Beautiful Auntie ... ... and I ditto Lovey (she hasn't been dittoed for so long, she forgot how it feels ... lol) ... you should write more ...

ps : and you have to tell the Frenchie what a schemer is

SMOOCH !

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23 posted 11-10-1999 04:16 AM       View Profile for Watcher666   Email Watcher666   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Watcher666's Home Page   View IP for Watcher666

Know this feeling well.Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.
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24 posted 02-27-2011 02:18 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Oh yeah.  I have been here, there and watched the dance.  Damn, I love your writing.

Alison
 
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