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0 posted 06-28-2011 10:19 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Gothic (goth-IK): a literary style popular during the end of the 18th century and the beginning of the 19th. This style usually portrayed fantastic tales dealing with horror, despair, the grotesque and other “dark” subjects. Gothic literature was named for the apparent influence of the dark gothic architecture of the period on the genre. Also, many of these Gothic tales took places in such “gothic” surroundings. Other times, this story of darkness may occur in a more everyday setting, such as the quaint house where the man goes mad from the "beating" of his guilt in Edgar Allan Poe's “The Tell-Tale Heart.” In essence, these stories were romances, largely due to their love of the imaginary over the logical, and were told from many different points of view. This literature gave birth to many other forms, such as suspense, ghost stories, horror, mystery, and also Poe's detective stories. Gothic literature wasn't so different from other genres in form as it was in content and its focus on the "weird" aspects of life. This movement began to slowly open may people's eyes to the possible uses of the supernatural in literature.


Let's see your gothic nature, Alison (and anyone else who wants to tag along). Unleash the horror within! No more Mr. Nice Guy!!Tell your tale in any form you wish. Should you use structured, you still need to follow the rules of rhyme and meter!
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1 posted 06-30-2011 01:56 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I'll give this a shot on Friday.  Had something in my head today, but I lost it.  The something - not my head!

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Witch rules of rhyme and meter?

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Ok, in all my time here I've never re-posted once, but, I immediately thought of this one as I feel it fits the theme nicely.
It was my take on a challenge issued by Assassin of Verse titled "Heads you Lose"

Their presence almost palpable
within these courtyard walls
as ominous foreboding clouds
lend credence to their calls

A sound of short duration made
more urgent by these haunts
in gruesome desolation each
unfinished echo taunts

Where shadow of the guillotine
once fell on blood drenched stone
to grieve in isolation of
detachment, quite alone

Where pleas befell those biased ears
while thunk of steel was heard
in witness to a harvest grim
and grins of severed words

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (07-01-2011 06:00 AM).]

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Alison...thank God! After reading Moose's entry, I wasn't sure!!

Serenity....you can write it in re-verse.  

Doc...I knew you had a touch of the macabre in you...well, more than a touch! Very chilling, sir, a hair-erasing tale. Nicely done!!

B U T...

since I must always exercise my teacher muscles (and with such joy in your case!), you hit the burr under my saddle with

where pleas did fall on biased ears

since "did" was obviously used as a filler to maintain meter with no value to the line. Since this is a repost I'll assume you wrote this before you fine-tuned your craft to be the master you now are.   I would suggest something like

where weak pleas fell on biased ears

...or the adjective of your choice.

Also, the Clearwater Revival can get away with being bad spellers but, unless you can sing like them, you can't.

That being said, you fulfilled the assignment admirably

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Lol, ok, "creedance" it is and "Where pleas befell those biased ears" which I think keeps the emphasis on "pleas" instead of the adjective, but maybe I'm just being argumentative, lol. Thanks.
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Not argumentative at all...that's a good adjustment.

No, creedance it isn't. Credence it is  
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Balladeer, lol, if I spelled it right the first time why'd you call me on it?
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"cause you gave it a double "e", doc
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Ha ha ha, I can't believe I overlooked that, must be I was seeing single.
Doc
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when the sun shines
all summer

l
o
n
g

monsters        t
                    i
                p
t
o
   e
out from under
my bed

and hide in
dark cracks and
cre   ices
     V
of the woodshed

growing more ugly
with longer teeth
and bUgly red eyes

as they sharpen their claws
on yesterdays
bones

sucking the marrow

whi
   le
  waiting to

    d
      a
         n
            c
               e

in my nightmares
    and to
          paint bloody
                       words

on my eyelids

_

Alison
  (who is too far from Goth to think "Goth")
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GothICK is way too
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Ah, dear Alison, its always a pleasure  to see you strut your stuff! Not only do you come up with an excellent poem, you even toss in  some excellent visuals, like making long long,  tiptoe look like feet,  the V depicting a crevice......do you realize just how good you are?? I doubt it. Lets just say that Marge would be very pleased
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Dear Balladeer,

This was fun to write and no.  I don't know that I do, but I do know that I appreciate you more than  you will ever know.

Thank you,

Alison
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14 posted 07-16-2011 12:06 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Nice job Alison, I'm with Balladeer all the way on this one.
Doc

Ok, since reposting isn't really the same as actually doing an assignment, here's mine. I've asked my good friend Vincent Price to do the reading for added effect.


It's rumored demons skulk these halls
an infestation vile
Dark haunts where madness comes of age
as core beliefs are trialled
A twilight land of half glimpsed shapes
whose vagueries of form
Alone convert ones' blood to ice
negating all that's warm

Defy these realms at your expense
no quarter will they grant
Their only purpose to decieve
and then ones' soul enchant
Awakened from a tortured sleep
one only need to dream
That you might keep them company
and scream their silent screams.

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Not a letter out of place, Doc....very nice indeed! Vincent Price could have done well with this one!
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Thank you, Doc.  Enjoyed the poem too.  You are dang good.

A
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Balladeer,
Thank you Maestro, and speaking of not a letter out of place, I see you're not having that typing glitch anymore. I'd like to think my "online exorcism" of your computer demons did the trick, lol.
Doc

Alison,
Thanks as always, glad you liked.
Doc
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ooh you guys are good i'd try this but meter and rhyme always scare me off hmmm maybe ill try it hmmm fine at very least it'll be dark i assure you i'll try!

tick tock goes the clock
above the the avian cemetery
tick tock goes the clock
all the flesh shaven corpse are merry
tick tock tick tock goes the clock
their laughter mocks the living
who are yet to cross the ferry
tick tock tick tock goes the clock
every crow becomes unburied
tainted doves flock the cemetery
tick tock tick tock tick tock goes the clock
make sure thy doors are locked
there is but a minute left; be weary
do not linger do not tarry
or thou shall find these birds to be quite dreary
tick tock tick tock tick tock goes the clock
cover thy mouth with a sock they may hear thee
can thou hearest them? they're quite scary
and will pluck thy eyeballs just like cherries

can'st thou dreadful witches hour?
filled with wretches such as these?

tick tock
tick tock tick tock
tick tock tick tock tick tock
tick tock tick tock tick tock tick tock
goes the clock above the avian cemetery


i know that was bad in rules but how about in dark? hmmm i think i may post this in dark....

yolilitzli

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typo at the end meant withstand/make it through

yolilitzli

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Dark indeed....and intriguing!! Your alliteration is superbly done to maximum effect. By all means, post it in Dark. Very excellent work, poet!
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thank you i was a bit unsure of it since i made it today
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tick tock
that was good.

A
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though ummm what exactly is ryhme and meter? i always have trouble with stuff like that
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You can check out earlier lessons here or simply type rhyme and meter in your search engine and you will get a wealth of information.
 
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