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0 posted 05-18-2011 08:27 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


Tired of meter? Tired of counting syllables? Anisometric verse is for you!

Anisometric verse is a type of poetic verse which does not have any corresponding poetic meter. No specific meter, no specific syllable counts, trash the trochees and bam the iambs! It's all up to you.

Hold on, though. You still need to make it sound good. The lines still have to sing and it has to be entertaining....also it has to rhyme, either a-b-a-b, a-a-b-b, or a-b-c-b. An example....?

Though this verse is witty and clever
And writing it took no time
It's all anisometric, using meters much as you would a lever
even if I did make it all rhyme.

So let's see what you come up with. Oh, yeah....your poem is to be about your favorite tv program. If you are one of the few humans on the planet who don't watch tv, then your favorite book. If you've never read a book, then a poem about your growing up on Mars!

Show me.....


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1 posted 05-19-2011 07:06 AM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Balladeer,
Leave it to you to take everything I've worked so hard to learn and throw it out the window, lol. You're on.
Doc
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2 posted 05-19-2011 11:19 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Me too.  See you both tonight!  

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This might be up my alley!

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Um.

I hereby submit all my failed attempts at metrics and forms.

(Somebody could have told me about this a lonnnnnnnnnnng time ago. If I ever learn how to say it, I'm going to say it real snooty:

*sniff*

"I write in the anisometric style of verse."



heh. It kinda sounds like some kinda physical therapy.

anisometrics...hmmm. Some kinda personal physical therapy.

And wow. I just blew a perfectly funny poem.

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Whoo Hoo! We got's some fun now. Now iffin' some of yuhs pick a dialect fer us'n t'speak I'll be all in. Ah, what the heck!

Supercalifragilistic
Mind control, hypnosis
According to some skewed statistics
That's my diagnosis

It may be you've lost your mind
Or your halitosis
Is so bad it's hard to find comparatives,
Atrocious?

Who would of ever guessed such things
So odious would dose us
As this piece of poetry
Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock,the clock is moving to and fro thus

Snap my fingers, you'll awake
feeling quite precocious
'cause you knew that all along we're expealidocious.

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (05-20-2011 07:01 AM).]

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Cool, doc! I have a few things to say about it later....right now I'm trying to figure out which tv show you're referring to!
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Supercalifragilistic
Mind control, hypnosis
According to some skewed statistics
That's my dianosis

It may be you've lost your mind
Or your halitosis
Is so bad it's hard to find comparatives
Atrocious?

Who would of ever guessed such things
So odious would dose us
As this piece of poetry
Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock,the clock is moving to and fro thus

Snap my fingers, you'll awake
feeling quite precocious
'cause you knew that all along we're expealidocious


hehe...can't take the meter out of the moose, I guess!  Let's see...

All second lines have 6 syllables, except the third but "so" is said so fast it almost isn't there.
12 of fifteen lines are pure trochaic....3 pure iambic.

Second stanza you got a little sneaky with the third and fourth lines but the fact of the matter is that they are a perfect 7-7 syllable count. Fourth stanza sneakiness again but if the third line is broken in two to add the final line, you have another perfect 7-7 syllable count!

Let's do it again!

Supercalifragilistic
Mind control, hypnosis
According to some skewed statistics
That's my dianosis

It may be you've lost your mind
Or your halitosis
Is so bad it's hard to find
Comparatives atrocious?

Who would of ever guessed such things
So odious would dose us
As this piece of poetry
Tick, Tock, Tick, Tock,the clock
Is moving to and fro thus

Snap my fingers, you'll awake
feeling quite precocious
'cause you knew that all along
we're expealidocious.

Almost sounds like a regular, metered poem......nice going, doc!!!

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Balladeer,
Aw,"g", which I left out of "diagnosis". Well, at least you had to add a fifth line to the third stanza, but you're definately right, it is almost impossible for me to wrap my head around un-metered verse, I'm just not wired that way.
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"impossible for me to wrap my head around un-metered verse,"

Thank God....don't ever change, please!
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10 posted 05-23-2011 07:08 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

hmmmm.....appears that asking poets to write a poem without meter or rhythm is too difficult!! LOLOL!
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Pasta Puttanesca


While I watched my beloved American Idol
I was thinking of Rachael Ray
And how she could take the odds and ends from my frig
That languish on the door on display

I thought of changing the channel
From songs filled with longing and fear
And tune into a show with more grit and substance
Like “Cooking with Heart and No Fear”

I clicked on my dear friend, the computer
And Googled with joy and some glee
I found a recipe I could create and conquer
(it even came with some history)

Pasta Puttanesca touched my heart and my taste buds
Anchovies sizzled with garlic and capers in oil
I tossed spices with wild abandon
(When cooking with Anchovies, there is not much one can spoil!)

Pasta Puttanesca has a story behind it
Of women in bordellos with windows flung wide
Bowls of fragrant pasta perched on the sill
To entice men with money inside

I sat down to watch American Idol
Sensuous aroma wafted to my nose from my dish
Ah, if I were only a woman of the evening
Pasta Puttanesca would help me grow rich

-

Alison

PS -  I know it's not about a tv show or a book.  I have been thinking of writing about Pasta Putanesca all danged day .. so I did!  Oh, and it tasted really good when I cooked it for lunch today!



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No problem, Alison. You worked American Idol in there....that works!

Yes, I know what you mean. Some days I wake up and say, "Today I think I'll write some Pasta Putanesca poetry!" This is a delicious poem. miss.

No, you wouldn't need Pasta Putanesca to help you get rich if you were a lady of the evening. Your linguini would be enough!!!
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Why thank you, Sir.  Some might think you are full of Cannoli, but I know you are sincere!



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Nice poem Alison! Hmm, my forays into this feel too unsatisfactory to post (pride and vanity are my weaknesses)
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Sincerity oozes from every pore, Alison!

If you were to apply Spanish to pasta putanesca and ladies of the evening, you would see how funny that is!
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Hey, Al, just drop your poem in and join us.  We all kind of "put it on the line" when we post poetry.  This is the place to share though.

'Deer, I think we both are talking about the same thing.  I think.

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Rasputin

I'm wearing my reading glasses because I'm at my computer,
I'm staring at the screen at last, and I'm grateful I'm not a commuter,
And I swear at the air that is harsh, and so sparse of all beauty, sucked out by all the polluters.

And there, the terror that is my nightmare dares me to carelessly pair with various nefarious heiresses...
In a parsley marsh I tie them with scarves and artlessly garnish their parts with sparkles and stars from irregular jars,
Shot out of flutes that are made from the roots of certain trees that bear fruits and then stored in Teutonic pewter.

Yet all is not futile; I am their lover, I am their brute, I am their looter

p.s. despite any passing resemblance to "In Xanadu", I am not on opium!
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Ah, forgot this was supposed to be about TV, got distracted!
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I get distracted all the time when I do these lessons.  I am glad that you posted your poem and I am happy that you are joining in at the Workshop, Al.

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Thanks Alison!

Workshop is way more fun - the feedback is genuine and really helpful in that is is also critical of form. Hopefully I will steadily improve my fare...

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Pssst, Balladeer, Post #17 is Al's contribution.  I think it got lost in the conversational shuffle.



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Thanks, Alison. I had thought by his comment he was coming back with a tv show so I was waiting for that and then i forgot!

It was good work. Al. with some real interesting plays on words but i ain't buying that you weren,'t high on SOMETHING when creating it!

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Thanks Balladeer, Alison, the lack of meter is a form that I find less appealing, as if I require the rhythm of the language to breathe the life into it for me - so that when the rhythm changes it has greater power.

Fun little exercise, and in the past 3 odd weeks I've already put together a nice little collection of poems - the ones out of these exercise forums / copying better known works are often more satisfying.

Cheers,
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I'm with you, Al. I feel better when the meter is running!
 
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