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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
In my travels with the "Wayback" machine I stumbled across what many consider to be the most "obscure" form of poetry, the "Chain Verse". Not to be confused with "Alice in Chains", the "Chain Pickerel", or the infamous "Chain Letter"( although if you don't hand in this assignment, myriad bad things will likely befall you ). Of the most commonly quoted examples, the first, attributed to my ancestor, Anon E. Moose, repeats the last word (or two) of each line as the beginning of the next line. The second example by some lesser known poet (John Byrom) repeats the entire last line of each stanza as the beginning of the next. "Nerve thy soul with doctrines noble, Noble in the the walks of time, Time that leads to an eternal An eternal life sublime. Life sublime in mortal beauty, Beauty that shall never be, Ever be to lure thee onward, Onward to the fountain free. Free to every earnest thinker, Seeker for the fount of youth, Youth exultant in it's beauty, Beauty of the living truth." Anon. Untitled John Byrom "My spirit longeth for thee Within my troubled breast, Although I be unworthy Of so divine a guest. Of so divine a guest, Unworthy though I be Yet has my heart no rest, Unless it comes from thee. Unless it comes from thee In vain I look around, In all that I can see, No rest is to be found. No rest is to be found But in thy blessed love, Oh let my wish be crowned, And send it from above." Our teacher, Balladeer, has graciously allowed me to contribute this assignment, so mind your P's and Q's, put your best appendage forward, and lets see some creativity. I will, of course, defer to Balladeer when it comes to grading. Have fun! Doc |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I'll do it but not because you can make me. I only listen to Balladeer - and the call of the wild, the dinner bell and the voices in my head. Okay - and you.  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Alison, Lol, I eagerly await your poetically poignant penning of profound perspective pertaining to this perspicacious endeavor, (Phew)! Doc |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I found a thing I like Like many poets do. Do different forms delight you? You, then, may like it, too! A conachlonn, it's called, Called by the Celts that way. Way to connect the lines, Lines chain-linked in display. The last word of each line Lines up to lead the next. Next time you want to try, Try not to be perplexed! So show me what you've got. Got time to give a try? Try not to give up soon Soon you will write like I!!!  /main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=93&topic=003116 Always good to give a refresher course, Doc!  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer, At first I wondered how I ever missed this assignment, then followed your link to "Open Poetry 36" which explains why. Interesting fact that it's roots are tracable to Celtic history where it was called "Clonachlonn", but of course you would know that, lol. Also, further research reveals, the rules are not as strict as repeating the whole word verbatim as in example #1, but merely the vowel sound. Doc |
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Balladeer
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True enough, Doc. Yes, back then the workshop wasn't really active and I remember now posting it in Open. I'm crushed to think you don't read my Open entries  ....heheYes, a lot of liberties can be taken with the form. I remember that I spent a little time trying to use words with the same sound but different meanings to construct it....talk about a toughie! Something like.. I found the perfect girl to marry. Merry were my youthful days, Dazed by strong desire to bed her, Better I had changed my ways. I may try that again.... |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer, Lol, actually I've read most if not all of your Open entries ( as with a number of poets here) I'm just not much when it comes to commenting on others works. I'd like to see your take on this, and I'm sure no one would mind your participation, I'm just not sure who would do the "grading". Oh, by the way, is one of those "liberties" where you don't have to use the last word of each stanza as the first word of the next? Doc My "contribution" as it were... It was here a sec ago, and now it's gone, Gone as if some hidden hand had thrown a switch Which explains why writing this is tough to do, Do the rules all still apply if you've no clue? Clue me in, oh fickle Muse, where has it gone? Gone the way night dissipates with coming dawn? Dawns anew another day but still is lost, Lost as if into the void it had been tossed! Tossed and turned a broken chain within my mind, Mindful of what had been lost, those missing links, Links now found thanks to a muse, sometimes their kind, Kind of helps your chain of thought work out its kinks. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I am going to have to integrate this boy's club of two - have some work to do around the house and will be back (after I am done scratching my head over linking words). A |
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Balladeer
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Doc, I think one of those liberties is that one can use same-sounding, different words, like Now I pay the cost Lost as I may be Be afraid of losing Choosing victory. As far as your entry is concerned, I have a problem with it. First, I can detect no common meter. If you check your examples given in your first post, you will see they used consistent meter. Without it, your poem is quite hard to read Second, I have a problem with the changing rhyme scheme. Your three stanzas are: a-b-c-c a-a-b-b a-b-a-b This adds to making your poem hard to follow. On the bright side, you chain very well!  |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
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Disregard my comment, doc, about the meter. I found the scheme you were using and it works well...my mistake! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Alison, Nope, no "Boys Club", we're just waitin' on some other participants, like maybe you? Doc Balladeer, Thanks, as for meter, yeah I threw in a twist, 3,4,4, per line, and skewed the rhyme scheme intentionally. Hey, bringing one of the most enduring forms of poetry into todays light, I thought deserved no less. Hard to follow ? Just imagine William Shatner reading this, and it will all fall into place, lol. And, I'm still going to call you on your repost, as none of your stanzas ending words contain the same vowel sound as the next stanzas beginning words. Doc |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
...and a good call it is, doc. I had concentrated on the lines of the stanzas but not the connecting stanzas themselves. Good catch on your part..... |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Okay, okay, I rose like a phoenix from frozen pipes - and gave it a shot. When the wind cries to the sea Sea gull screams drown out her fears Fears once dormant in her breast Her breast covered now with tears. Tears that slide from hidden eyes Eyes that begged once to be blind Blind to loss, to death, to dreams Dreams now distant, out of mind Mind the wind and thrashing tides Tides erase all signs of life Life that died in winter storm Storms that cut like sharpest knife - Alison |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ah, dear Alison. Elusive as you are, you do know how to make an entrance. I knew you would have no problem with this....and you didn't. Fine writing, miss  |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Awww, dear Balladeer, thank you, my friend. Let's see how the Moose Man grades it. I appreciate you both. xoxoxo Alison |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Alison, No, no , no, I don't do grading! If I did , however, you'd get top marks from me. Nice read, good subject matter and story line, well executed. Oh, and glad to see you're doing your part to dispel the notion that class has devolved into some kind of "Boys Club", lol. Doc |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
not even a boy's club any longer,,,,more like a deer's club since no one will even attempt meter.....deer can be lonely beasts, for sure.  |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Moose and 'Deer. I will move on to meter. Love this "not for boys only" club A |
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AlCowie Member
since 2011-05-13
Posts 92London, UK |
To combine this with the post on Meterology (form described below): Red nectar from a bottle that's from France France, where Englishmen will holiday; Will holiday, enjoy the sun and dance, Dance as wild abandoned men away; A way through dreary days at a desk; Desk of hate, back in London grotesque. Grotesque that we must earn a pound to eat, Eating, drinking, life comes at a cost, A cost to dignity and balance sheet, Balance sheet of life at work that's lost: Lost's the time that we work and not live; And not live; and not live; and not live. Form: d'Dum, d'Dum, d'Dum, d'Dum, d'DAY, Dum, d'Dum, d'Dum, d'Dum, d'BEE, d'Dum, d'Dum, d'Dum, d'Dum, d'DAY, Dum, d'Dum, d'Dum, d'Dum, d'BEE, d'd'Dum, d'd'Dum, d'd'CEE, d'd'Dum, d'd'Dum, d'd'CEE, |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well done, AlCowie! We have another member who likes to combine lessons and create poems relating to both at the same time. Quite the coincidence |
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