Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
Boy, it's easy to tell who's been absent from class for a while. What happened to my heros, my superstars???
Cleverly written, Moose, as all your works are....very entertaining. Pentameter is five feet, 10 syllables per line. You went with eight. 14 and 10 is a good combination that works, 14 and 8, not so much. Maybe that's why you don't like the way it sounds?
Other than that, it's great. Your internal rhymes are good and perfectly placed, and your wit shines as bright as always. Great to have you back, good sir.