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Mysteria
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25 posted 01-06-2010 03:17 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Well, this challenge has made quite an impact on my daily journal.  I have made space to talk to me about things LOL, and it is working out just great!
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26 posted 01-06-2010 10:11 PM       View Profile for Oklahoma Rose   Email Oklahoma Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Oklahoma Rose

You all did great. I do get to drop in from time to time.

I really enjoyed reading you Balladeer!
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27 posted 01-06-2010 11:28 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Alison, you done good! You gave both sides and I could feel the sincerity in your words...nicely done.

ps...boiled eggs in the cold cream jar? Did you REALLY???????
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28 posted 01-06-2010 11:42 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

uh huh



Not my fault no one found it at Easter.
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29 posted 01-07-2010 03:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

What a devil you are, er, must have been!
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30 posted 02-02-2010 10:53 AM       View Profile for KatVern17   Email KatVern17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for KatVern17

I saw this and I wanted to try so here was my attempt.
Hello me, hello me?

"Hello, I'm here
Life ahead may get tough
All you gotta do is come near."
I said when the line came up

"Get up and stop being so lazy
Help your mom
Studying is much to easy."

"Hello, you reached pizza hut
How can I help you?
Don’t be such a nut!
Oh and again tell me who."

“Always joking around.
Take things serious for once
You never like hounds
This is the biggest of them all
My hunch.”

“You’ll get greedy
You’ll feel alone
You are a person that’s needy
You’re home.”

“You’re a little late there buckaroo
I don’t have many friends
I’m still waiting to know who
Everyone is just an hen”

“I’m always alone
School’s is like gay
I stay at home
HAY!”
I said to the other me.

I wanted to tell her
Her heart would be broken
She’d be teased
She would try things
That she would regret

I went to speak
But I was too late
The line went dead
I wanted to tell her
She would forever be loved
And missed…

* I think I lost it just a bit *

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31 posted 02-02-2010 11:59 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Hello, KatVern!  Thank you for joining in. Yes, you lost it in several places but you saved everything with the last two stanzas...an excellent ending. Nice to meet you...
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32 posted 05-31-2010 01:18 AM       View Profile for rachaelfuchsberger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rachaelfuchsberger

There you sit in days gone by
I watch you wondering "Why oh why?"
I'll tell you now the going gets tough
But you'll learn quick to just be rough

If I knew then what I do now
You'd quit wondering "How oh how?"
Don't fret 'cause you'll get through
Hello me, this is you.

Goddess grant me the serenity to accept the things that I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference.

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33 posted 05-31-2010 10:00 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Ah, Rachael...this could use a little work. The syllable counts are off, the meter is off and I think maybe you wrote this one a little too fast, without giving it a lot of thought...don't rush. I'm always here..
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34 posted 05-31-2010 01:50 PM       View Profile for rachaelfuchsberger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rachaelfuchsberger

As always good Sir, you've guessed at why this piece has no set meter. But not ALL of why. You see if my past me received a poem from my present me that had perfect form and rhym and meter then my past me would never believe that it was from the persent me.

Goddess grant me the serenity to accept the things that I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference.

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35 posted 06-04-2010 01:39 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Phone Call To My Younger Self
.
.
Hey, blondie, this is you
from your future-
just thought I`d call today
to give advice-
What`s that? How does this work?
Never mind now-
just listen, if you will,
I can`t call twice.
I know you think the sun
does rise for you-
and every golden day
and every eye,
and every heart your due-
well I say now:
it`s `nothing gold can stay`
you realize.
Cultivate that garden-
soul`s desire,
beneath bright surfaces
life`s pool is deep,
you`re more than just a face
or shapely figure-
don`t spend your days in iambs:
make believe.
Say yes to Erik, then
say no to Doug-
(just trust me on this one-
you`re better off)
and take the writing class
that you wanted,
not dental; oh it`s bleak
and time is soft.
Believe your english prof
when he tells you
the building blocks are there-
don`t scorn your muse,
embrace the old cliche
and then live it:
purposely: `to thine own
self be true`.
and lastly, blondie, well
you should know it
there`s nothing wrong inside:
you have such worth-
God doesn`t make mistakes
so look up now,
love freely, while you
are here on Earth.

.
.
Bleagh.. not sure I like this; wrote it so fast~!  =P
~A
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36 posted 06-04-2010 06:42 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

hehe....ok, then, write it slow.

Assignments are not to be rushed through like a race. The idea is to take your time, do your best, and be happy with your finished product. If you present it with a disclaimer that you may not like it, then I don't like it, either.

GIMMEE SOMETHING YOU LIKE!!!


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37 posted 06-04-2010 08:38 PM       View Profile for Amaryllis   Email Amaryllis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Amaryllis

Hear hear! Loud & clear.. and I agree.   Guess I was just using the Workshop as a scribbling wall, to get the pen unstuck- but that`s not fair. So~! I shall indeed go about designing one I like.. s`okay to post again, or shall I just edit the above??
Thanks again!
~A
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38 posted 06-04-2010 09:28 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Post to your heart's content, new friend. Tingling with anticipation here....
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39 posted 06-22-2010 12:55 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Some Aeronautical Advice to my Younger Self ( or, You Will Believe a Moose Can Fly )

You ain't no superhero slick, do not dive headfirst onto bricks!
( Only five feet right straight down, head wounds bleed like hell I've found. For one brief second I could fly, well worth the scar above my eye.)

Hands greased with frosting from a cake do not a trapeze artist make!
( For fourteen feet I was aloft, the landing, anything but soft, to swing like Tarzan though the trees, one broken humerous if you please!)

You should unplug an amplifier prior to messing with its' wires!
(Eight feet through the air I flew in an arc when that thing blew. A flash, a pop, then coming to... in retrospect not smart to do.)

Though you may have the right of way the larger object rules the day!
( Twenty-eight feet from me to shoes, and six weeks to recover too! Where she came from I have no clue, back then we didn't know how to sue!)

Mix alcohol and snowmobiles to make for one painful ordeal!
( My one attempt at backward flight, not much distance or much height, a third of a kneecap's better than none, up to that point it was fun!)

Wheelie riding while on a bike should be saved for the younger tykes!
(A three foot distance to the ground will cause you to make "Owwie" sounds, concrete sidewalks, softer grass, no doubt where I set my a**!)

To demonstrate your first slam dunk don't wait until you're quite that drunk!
( A shoulder plant from eight feet up's not good for your rotator cup, NBA star? No way! I ain't, and broken bones can make you faint!)

And so my history of flight became the subject of this write,
up to this point there, younger guy, I have no doubt that we can fly!
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40 posted 06-24-2010 07:57 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Doc, you have truly been missed!

Excellent work, as fun to read as I'm sure it was to write. Perfect internal rhymes, meter, comedy and filled with sage advice for moose and men.

Bravo, mooseman!
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41 posted 07-28-2010 12:34 AM       View Profile for Eterne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Eterne's Home Page   View IP for Eterne

Hello sweetheart,
how are you today?

I just wanted to tell you:
It is good to dream,
and beautiful...
Sometimes dreams do come true:
One day you will have that brother
you’ve always wanted to have;

strangely enough,
he won’t be your sibling
nor your relative,
yet he will be closer to your heart
than anyone else you’ll ever know
in your entire life.

Does he know about you?
No, he does not know yet
but when you will meet
he won’t ever forget,
because he misses you
since the day he was born,
same as you miss him:
in your play,
in your drawings,
in your stories,
in your dreams...

Will he love you?
Yes, with all his heart and soul.

Will you be together forever?
Sorry baby,
the answer to that question
I still do not know...

Let’s dream together:
Sometimes dreams do come true.
It is good to dream
and beautiful...

Eterne E. S.
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42 posted 07-28-2010 09:06 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Do you mind very much, Sir 'Deer, if I take this idea and run with it straight to our poetry/writer's meeting this week? I was given the honor of being the moderator for more than one week in a row...

and I needed a really fresh idea.

What do you say, sir?

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43 posted 07-28-2010 09:51 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Eterne, that is precious. You wrote it with such tenderness and delicasy, I was completely caught up in it. Very beautiful work....

Sunshine, my ideas are your ideas. I'm honored to have you use it....please do so and share with us how your writers did.
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44 posted 07-28-2010 10:40 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Oh, I will, and thank you...

This is how I've framed the task!

quote:
HOMEWORK
Time to get the poetic juices flowing.

Your assignment, should you choose to accept it, is to make a call to yourself in your past persona.

Pick up the imaginary phone, cell phone, IM or email, and talk to the person you were when you were younger and offer the you of then some advice, warnings, or whatever you want to say to yourself. Of course, since you are on the other end of the line, too, you may include how the younger you might respond to such a call or the advice given. Darn, rebellious, fearless youngsters that we all were!!

Choose any form you wish. For those using structured forms, you still need to adhere to the rules of that structure with regards to meter, syllable counts, etc. Prose works as well.

It's something you can have a little fun with....and even a little soul-searching retrospect at the same time.

[Borrowed in part from Passions in Poetry / Poetry Workshop Forums, with the approval of the site’s moderator, Balladeer]



As you can see, we have folks who don't know from a land line phone... ...so I am hoping you are okay with the additions to the initial request. I will most certainly let them know that some or all of their writings might be shared...



and great thanks!



Please let me know if you have any additions, suggestions or comments before we meet on the first Monday of August.

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45 posted 07-29-2010 08:27 AM       View Profile for Eterne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Eterne's Home Page   View IP for Eterne

Thank you, Balladeer!
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46 posted 07-29-2010 08:48 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

What possible suggestions could I have for people who don't know from a land-line phone??

No, it sounds great, Sunshine. It will be interesting to see how it turns out!
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47 posted 12-02-2010 07:03 AM       View Profile for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Email s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit s1nfully_1nn0c3nt's Home Page   View IP for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt

Oooh, I'm going to write something for this, but I'm taking your advice. It'll take some time, but I'm excited cause it'll be interesting to see how I'd address myself and what would follow in uh....my conversation with myself.

-Trina.

"A heart that can't feel its broken- can't heal."

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48 posted 12-02-2010 07:19 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

(tingling with anticipation, Trina!)
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49 posted 12-05-2010 07:20 PM       View Profile for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Email s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit s1nfully_1nn0c3nt's Home Page   View IP for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt

"Ice Cream"

"Hewo" she said
"Hello,little girl
how are you today"

"I'm happy, I had
ice cweam with
my daddy and
we went to the
pwetty beach"

*Wow, who would've
thought that those-
such simple things,
made one happy*
"Do you like ice cweam"
"Well, apparently
I love it, but
its been awhile
since I've truly
  enjoyed it."

"but why?"
"Well life is
  busy
I don't have time
for such trivial things"

"trivial? like games?
oh, I love games!"

*games? I had to smirk*
"no sweetie, not games
right now, enjoying
isn't so important"

"liar! it is important"
she shot back
"Ice cweam makes
people happy
you have to be
happy, love yourself
so people will see
and do the same.
My daddy said so!"

*such arrogance
  this little girl
she'd argue with
  a brick wall
if she thought
it was wrong*
"Sorwy, my daddy
is calling me
bye bye"

with that
it had ended
and I was left
with this emptiness
so I walked to the kitchen
took out a pint of "Ice cweam"
as she said, and enjoyed
all the memories
came rushing back
and I cried tears
of joy

and here I thought
I made the call
which traveled through
space and time to
give my younger self
some needed advice
who would've thought
at the age of just five
I'd teach myself
       to love.


_____________________________________________
At first I thought, "What would I tell my younger self?" and as I read through some of the replies here, I wasn't really excited about this. THEN I thought, "How could I spin this?" and it hit me

Instead of trying to teach my younger self something, it would be interesting to see what I could LEARN and here it is. Enjoy.

Oh and on a side note, I think by now we all know I'm not really a fan of structure and stuff  



-Trina.

"A heart that can't feel its broken- can't heal."
 
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