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The Dynamic Duo(-rhyme)

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                Duo-rhyme

The Duo-rhyme, a poetic form created by Mary L. Ports, is a 10 or 12-line poem, with the first two
and last two lines having the same rhyme scheme, and the center of the poem (lines #3 through #8 or #10)
having their own separate monorhyme scheme.

Meter: 8 beats per line, written in iambic tetrameter (4 linear feet of iambic)
Rhyme Scheme: 10-line: a,a,b,b,b,b,b,b,a,a and 12-line: a,a,b,b,b,b,b,b,b,b,a,a
              Example

             Visitation

Oh, midnight wind with whisperings,
come tease sweet fairyís crystal wings.
    How gracefully she floats tonight
    with purple billows flowing bright.
    Dear, wistful spirit in the night,
    through starlit mist she casts her light.
    For welcomed cheek, a kiss just right
    is softly placed so that one might
    receive her blessings without fright;
    loveís beauty sought, a soulís delight.
To realms of wonder in my dreams
Iíll float upon the songs she sings.

Copyright © 2007 Mary L. Ports

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1.

You must have heard of ducks born black
who cannot swim and cannot quack.
     It came to pass an old tzigane
     who, on her way to the divan
     (where sit the sages of Iran),
     came to the shores of Lake Sevan
     and fell asleep (she was quite wan.)
     Then from her lamp a droll shaitan
     escaped to play tricks on a swan
     by placing in her nest a guan.
So donít be shocked when, in your shack,
you find a parrot that can quack.

_________________________________________

2.

So you wonít end up black and blue,
of far-off lands, Iíll tell you true:
    donít dance too wildly to a zouk
    not after lunching on a snook
    bought in a hot and filthy souk
    for should you swallow down a fluke
    perhaps it could cause you to puke
    on the chibouk of a Shilluk
    or the peruke of a grand duke
    and you would get quite a rebuke.
Itís safer at your local zoo
or better still, Kalamazoo.



[This message has been edited by Marc-Andre (10-20-2009 06:41 AM).]

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Marc-Andre, you certainly take the road less-traveled, don't you?

I wear out my dictionary, following you! Having said that, this is brilliant work. It's fresh, innovative and a fine piece of writing.

Write on, sir...
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Yep, I try to live true to the words of Robert Frost 8) I'm glad to hear you've enjoyed it. Thought I'd try some children poetry (Ted Hughes poems are on my night table, along with Rossetti and Frost.)
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          Janes' Lament

Ol' beastie boy and I are quits
as life with him is just the pits!
Don't never mind that crap he tells
this ain't no place for Southern belles.
A freakin' igmoo's where he dwells
the man don't bathe and PHEW, he smells!
His lovin' sure don't ring no bells,
I ask him for some measly shells,
UNGAWA's all he ever yells!
The very thought of him repells,
I'm movin' back into the Ritz
that loser y'all can kiss my grits!
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Again, I will try this form. I have posted the rework of my other one from the last lesson, and posted it there.

Arana Darkwolf

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ToGEther WE are LOVE deFINED
And NEVer WE need TO reMIND
That WE will ALways BE as ONE
Till LIFE on EARTH is DEAD and DONE
ToGEther WE are MOON and SUN
ForEVer YOU will BE the ONE
Our SOULS will BE forEVer SPUN
Our FATed LOVE nevER unDONE
ToGEther AS lovERS' hearts BIND
Our FATES will BE alWAYS enTWINED


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Moose, I know it's a jungle out there but you are really into it, it appears!

Poor Tarzan thought he was adored
Until Jane threw him overboard!
No more night swinging through the trees
Or someone there to pick off fleas.
Although he begged on bended knees
She was not swayed by tearful pleas.
To her heart he had lost the keys.
He was so blind he didn't see
That Jane was just a little tease
Who had a thing for chimpanzees!!
So much for our poor jungle Lord
Who got tossed out without a word.
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Balladeer,
Glad to see you're getting into the "swing" of things. Nip adoo 2u2.
Doc
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~patiently awaiting an analysis of my contribution~

Arana Darkwolf

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~starts fidgeting~

Goddess grant me the serenity to accept the things that I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference.

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Thanks for the budge, Rachel

You started off great but lost it in the last three lines, I'm afraid.

Our FATed LOVE nevER unDONE
ToGEther AS lovERS' hearts BIND
Our FATES will BE alWAYS enTWINED

Actually, that reads....

our FATed LOVE NEVer unDONE
toGETher as LOVers' hearts BIND
our FATES will be  ALways enTWINED.
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ToGEther WE are LOVE deFINED
And NEVer WE need TO reMIND
That WE will ALways BE as ONE
Till LIFE on EARTH is DEAD and DONE
ToGEther WE are MOON and SUN
ForEVer YOU will BE the ONE
Our SOULS will BE forEVer SPUN
ForEVer WE will BE as ONE
The WORLD will HEAR our LOVE'S oPINE
ForEVer IS not Enough TIME

Goddess grant me the serenity to accept the things that I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference.

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~waits patiently for the critique of the re-write~

Goddess grant me the serenity to accept the things that I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference.

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Got down to the last sentence!

ForEVer IS not Enough TIME

reads as...

forEVer is NOT eNOUGH TIME
forEVer IS NOT eNOUGH TIME
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ToGEther WE are LOVE deFINED
And NEVer WE need TO reMIND
That WE will ALways BE as ONE
Till LIFE on EARTH is DEAD and DONE
ToGEther WE are MOON and SUN
ForEVer YOU will BE the ONE
Our SOULS will BE forEVer SPUN
ForEVer WE will BE as ONE
The WORLD will HEAR our LOVE'S oPINE
Our LOVE is MORE than WHAT'S deFINED

Goddess grant me the serenity to accept the things that I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference.

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By jove...I think she's got it!!!!

Way to hang in there, m'lady
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When I was young I felt a need,
longed for the day when I could read.
    I sorted books as if to gauge
    that magic time Iíd come of age
    to fly out from a silent cage,
    and join the letters on a page.
    Desire could not be assuaged;
    it sparked an ember, born to rage
    until I sat on center stage
    to read as if I were a sage.
There came a day when I was freed
and now I spread the reading seed.

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Alison, it is such a pleasure reading you these days. You were not off one syllable or beat in this entire poem....plus the subject matter is very clever.

I applaud you, m'lady
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I wish I was clever enough to express how much this time in the Workshop has meant to me.

You have helped me every step of the way.



Thank you
Alison
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            Tarzans' Rebuttal

Jane leave nyumba, made my day,
farasi's punda anyway !
Tumbilis make a better mate
for her to leave I just couldn't wait.
No more "to do" list on my plate,
the swingin' single life is great!
She was one baya, bovu date,
she made me want regurgitate
and write Swahili to translate!
I told her "Leave, don't hesitate,
go take a hike without delay!"
She made me gonjwa, as they say!
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Before the great evaluation... I messed up and didn't read the instructions thoroughly!   Well, that brings it down to at best a"B" bbbbbut, I had fun doing this anyway.   I tried an experiment in using as few words as possible, and in doing that, I completely forgot it was supposed to have a monorhyme in between!   Oh shucks!  Well, here it goes anyway.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

              To Home


To home.   Come alone  with me  to home
And take the path alone of stone.
Beneath  the trees  of leaves and rakes,
Bequeath the bees the pollen safe
When flies to golden cells of hives
  To please their queen of beeís delight.
Then,home the bees at rest  will take
For not the queen will they forsake.
At forest edge  of homeward go
Where trees  of leaves the wind does blow
Above the eaves alone to roam
To roam with you at home alone

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Hey, as long as you had fun, that's something.

Moose, I had always wondered how you became gonjwa!
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Marc-Andre, your poem is hilarious!
I think this duo-rhyme was invented to poems like yours :-)

It reads well (plus it's a story), despite the monotonous rhymes in the middle and it does make a perfect sense:

"You must have heard of ducks born black
who cannot swim and cannot quack.
     (...)
So donít be shocked when, in your shack,
you find a parrot that can quack."

Brava! LOL!
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When Autumn`s vagrant zephyrs press
upon September`s youthful zest,
Oh then remember April frayed
by wind and water cavalcade,
or tender May, who with her spade
prepared for June a bright parade
and how July, inspired, made
an August sunshine marmalade,
so let the daylight effervesce
and recognize which is, is best.
 
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