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The kyrielle is an old French form used originally by the Troubadors during the Renaissance era. It was named after the kyrie, an aspect of the Christian liturgy. Kyrie is a derivative of kyrios, a Greek word meaning “Oh, Lord.” The Kyrie Eleison was instituted by the Catholic church as a liturgical form of worship and involves a congregational chanting of the words, “Lord, have mercy.” Consequently, many early kyrielles used the phrase throughout the poetic form as an homage to the Christian liturgy.

While The kyrielle is a single form, it does have variants. Traditionally, kyrielles have been written in quatrains, but a variant of the form can have it in couplets. The usual rhyme scheme follows this pattern:

aabB
ccbB
ddbB


Other rhyme schemes are:

abaB-cbcB-dbdB

axaB-cycB-dzdB

The B in all of the above schemes are the repeating lines.


Another variation of the kyrie is the kyrielle sonnet, a 14-line poem written with three quatrains followed by a couplet.

While there is quite a bit of variation in the rhyme scheme of the kyrielle, the meter is more set. Originally, kyrielles were octosyllabic – that is, written in eight metrical feet. In English, the meter is iambic tetrameter.


I will deviate from the original use of the Kyrielle which had all poems in this form relating only to religion. Choose any topic you like that has a strong repeating word.

I would include an example but all that I found had errors in them so it's up to you to create the perfect ones!

As a side note, I can mention rhyme schemes, Iambic tetrameter, quatrains and any other poetic descriptions I choose...and you all know what I'm talking about! A year ago, I would have been greeted with a chorus of HUH?'s. Many of you have come a long way. Hats off to you!

Ready....set.....
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This form appeals to me more than the HexSonneta! I hope my poem is up to snuff! I await the verdict ~ and any suggestions that you may have, dear Deer.

Spring is Nigh  (Kyrielle)

Loud thunder rumbles through the hills.
The rain flows over country rills.
The lightning streaks the roiling sky.
Farewell to winter ~ spring is nigh.

Spring showers help the plant-life grow.
The earth drinks deep from shower flow.
Returning geese go winging by.
Farewell to winter ~ spring is nigh.

Dull browns and grays will soon be green.
The rivers, streams are cool and clean.
The flowers bloom and grass grows high
Farewell to winter ~ spring is nigh.

LLD
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2 posted 10-02-2009 01:29 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Linda ~ I so loved your poem that I had to try out the opposing view.  Hope it fits the criteria of the assignment.  

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The leaves have turned a bitter red
And woods smell like slow rotting dead
With rancid odors in the air.
The winter brings fresh views to share.

These stripped down branches will be white.
The moon will glow will special light.
When darkness seems too much to bear,
The winter brings fresh views to share.

The beaver work in wooded dens
And tree limbs fill with grousing hens.
Fox sneaking, hunting Snowshoe hare;
The winter brings fresh views to share.

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Well, m'dear poetess! From what I can tell ~ It's perfect!

Gosh, girlfriend, yer goooood!!!!!

~ Truly a pleasure to read ~ and envision!


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Whoa, everyone's all over this and way ahead of me with some great work! Um, question... in the Kyrielle sonnet I follow the rhyme scheme for the three quatrains no problem but what about the ending couplet?
To use "B" you would repeat the same line three times in row which even by French standards would be overkill, no?
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Good grief! They are both exceptional. Nice work, ladies.

Since you two work well together and have two of the seasons covered, why not go all the way on a collaboration and each take one of summer and winter to fill out the idea?

Then you would REALLY be "seasoned" poets!
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Not sure I understand, Moose. The ending couplet would be bB. The two lines of the couplet would rhyme, not be the same line.

As far as overkill for the French, we are talking about the country that created the Triolet, where the same line is used three times in an eight line poem. NOTHING is overkill for them!  
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Lol, gotcha, my mistake!
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Balladeer ~

Thank you! That is an intriguing propositionl~ Poetically speaking, that is!

Here is my Kyrielle Sonnet offering ~

The Poet  (Kyrielle Sonnet)

With slip of sun at evening’s end
~ the poet’s mind will then transcend.
He writes the mots within his seam
~ puts pen to paper as in dream.

In stillness of the darkest nite
~ by flame of candle burning brite,
the poet sits and ponders theme
~ puts pen to paper as in dream.

From deep within his magic ink,
lies sea of notions, deep in think.
He writes a poem from just a gleam
~ puts pen to paper as in dream.

A poet with his thoughts in stream
~ puts pen to paper as in dream.

LLD
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EA,
Darn but you're a tough act to follow! Lol.
Doc

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A whoopie cushion on a chair
fake flatulence is fun, I swear!
I laugh so hard I darn near pee
just give me some frivolity!

Bananna peels and pratfalls, yes!
It's good old fashioned fun I guess
that gets a chuckle out of me,
just give me some frivolity!

Three Stooges with their nyuck, nyuck, nyuck!
A rubber chicken, Daffy duck,
the endless possibilities...
just give me some frivolity!

Not drivel called "reality"
just give me some frivolity!
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Moose, is there a Doctor in the house?!?  I darn near split my seams reading your humorous piece of frivolity! ~ and you did it in fine form, to boot!


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Angel, I love the last one! One line bothers me, though..

lies sea of notions and deep think.

It just doesn't ring right with me somehow....kinda hard for me to put the accent on "and". I would suggest something like...

lies sea of notions, deep in think

Just a suggestion. The rest is brilliant..
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Thanks, Balladeering One. I'll go back and see what I can do to make the teacher happy.

Okay, I have now changed

"lies sea of notions and deep think."

to

"lies sea of notions, deep in think"

As you have so brilliantly suggested!

Guess what, teach! I took you up on your challenge and have written a Kyrielle Sonnet for the winter season! Hope you like it! Keeping my proverbial wings crossed!

Falling Snow   (Kyrielle Sonnet)

December wears a mantle white.
The air is crisp this winter’s night.
Thru’ amber rays of lamplight glow
~ stream crystal flakes of falling snow.

Across an opalescent sky,
a Great Horned Owl goes winging by.
Thru’ cedar bows in brumal blow
~ stream crystal flakes of falling snow

Tho’ standing high on Beacon Hill,
I’m wrapped in warmth ~ no winter chill.
Thru’ wooded valley far below
~ stream crystal flakes of falling snow.

Thru’ winter scenes from long ago
~ stream crystal flakes of falling snow.

LLD

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His words of wit spill out in verse
In quatrains strange but not perverse.
Our laughter roars when he cuts loose..
Thank God we  have our Dr. Moose.

He takes the road less traveled by
To put a twinkle in our eye.
His train of thought has no caboose.
Thank God we have our Dr. Moose.

He's quite the card in games we play
With rhyme to brighten up our day.
Sometimes the ace, sometimes the deuce
Thank God we have our Dr. Moose.

How does his mind come up with things
Creating all the fun it brings?
A cross between PeeWee and Zeus.
Thank God we have our Dr. Moose.

His wit is shaken, never stirred,
Intoxicating, every word.
He fills our hunger like cous-cous
Thank God we have our Dr. Moose.

They say that moose and deer don't mix,
A silly thought that I can nix.
He lays eggs like the golden goose..
Thank God we  have  our Dr. Moose!
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Angel...I don't care for that one, either. Don't hit me!!! Since you have now put an accent on "in", which is fine, why not just say "a sea of think"? It sounds less cumbersome to me that way....just my thought.

You newest one leaves me cold....and that's a good thing! I can see and feel winter through your words. Nicely done!

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BRAVO! Standing ovation! Cheers to both cervine creatures with their acerbic wit and charm.

btw, I got a little confused when I was making my last reply re the changing of that dubious line. I later realized that you had given me a great line ~ and I have now incorporated it into the poem! Thanks you!


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me oh my! If home is where you place your hat, then it would appear as though you have two homes! Aw, yes! Home Sweet Home!

btw, Have a cold one on me!

BTW ~ I think you made your last reply before you could read my edited one. I later noticed that you had written a line for me that you thought would work ~ and it does! ~ and I used it!


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Excellent...it fits very well
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My summer offering --

The roses dip and dance in pink
Among the honey bees who drink
The nectar from the blossoms sweet
~ as summer offers nature’s treats

When breezes gently stir the leaves
And robins call from cherry trees
The woodpecker will peck a beat
~ as summer offers nature’s treats

The thunder showers shower rain
And puddles form from spilling drains
Small children play with muddy feet
~ as summer offers nature’s treats

A time that sunlight spills with heat
~ as summer offers nature’s treats

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Alison


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Alison! We covered all four seasons for our beloved teacher! I wrote on spring and winter ~ you, the fall and summer! Loved the feel of your poems!

It is apparent that you enjoy writing in this form as much as I do! It is so  rhythmical!


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Ah, Doc Moose and Balladeer, you both gave me such laughter today.  Thank you - and Linda?  What beautiful writing and what fun to write with you.  When these are approved, shall we post them as one poetic offering.  You are the first person I have ever written with and it was much fun.  

Love you all,
A
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To all,
And on that note, I shall retire for the evening with a great big smile on my face, knowing that in this world of way too many problems, if just for a moment, I have succeeded in putting a smile on some well deserving faces.
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Approval give....they are dynamite. Two gifted poets in perfect sync....go for it!
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Yay!

Go for it, Linder Lou!

 
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