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The monotetra is a new poetic form developed by Michael Walker. Each stanza contains four lines
in monorhyme. Each line is in tetrameter (four metrical feet) for a total of eight syllables. What makes
the monotetra so powerful as a poetic form, is that the last line contains two metrical feet, repeated.
It can have as few as one or two stanzas, or as many as desired.

Stanza Structure:

Line 1: 8 syllables; A1
Line 2: 8 syllables; A2
Line 3: 8 syllables; A3
Line 4: 4 syllables, repeated; A4, A4


Example:


An Angel Spoke To Me Today

An angel spoke to me today
But what she said I cannot say
Though my mind's eye strives to replay
It slips away, it slips away...

I know she came into my room
And lifted me from pain and gloom
To see the beauty of the moon
But gone too soon, but gone too soon...

Her words - they flowed like honey spun
From the rays of the ling'ring sun
And when the whole affair was done
I was at one, I was at one.

An angel spoke to me today
And what she taught I still replay
For all the blacks and browns and grays
Have gone away, have gone away.

Copyright © 2003 Michael Walker


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Hey!  Somebody's playing hookey!!!
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Hi Balladeer, my friend! How are you feeling? I may try this one. I'll see what I can come up with.
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I just finished designing my best friend's wedding invitation.  We got it printed tonight - after a week or so of hair tearing and re-doing.  I will be back this weekend to post to this assignment.  I remember Ruth did this a few years ago and I tried it.  It's a fascinating poetic style .. for me anyway.

Welcome back, dear 'deer.  I missed you.



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Playing hookey? ~ Not I, not I.

Fairy in the Well  (Monotetra)

While walking through the wooded dell,
I heard a cry from nearby well
What fairy said ~ as down she fell,
~ I will not tell, I will not tell...

On rim of well, there sat a crow.
It asked me to look down below
As gentle breeze began to blow
~ I saw a glow, I saw a glow...

I lowered bucket ~ “Help is nigh!”
With great relief, she breathed a sigh.
As sun burst through the brooding sky
~ We waved goodbye, we waved goodbye...

While walking through the wooded dell,
I heard a cry from nearby well
What fairy said ~ as down she fell,
~ I will not tell, I will not tell...

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Alison, you must have posted your reply while I was writing mine! That is wonderful that you designed your best friend's wedding invitations! She is fortunate to have an artistic ~ and generous ~  friend such as yourself!

Sending best wishes to your friend and her fiance for a long and joyful, prosperous, healthy, bountiful life together!


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I can see the wedding invitations now....two moose locking horns with the caption "Come blubber with us"! Sounds like fun!
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Ah, Angel, you come through once again. I didn't expect the construction to give you much of a problem but it's the topics you come up with that amaze. Rescuing a fairy who had fallen down a well? Your mind would be a nice place to visit! For that matter, so.......ah, never mind
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Thank you, 'deer' Buck-aroo!


The roads are varied in my mind
And if you entered, you would find,
My thoughts are often metered rhyme
~ Of fantasy and the sublime.



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Don't give up on me yet.
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Linder, I agree with Balladeer.  Your poetry tells such imaginative stories.  It flows beautifully and ... I want to know.  I want to know.

Moose horns locking?  That cracked me up.  Whata loada BULL!

Love you guys,

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Ok, here is my attempt for this assignment.
Well, I messed this one up too. So, I'll give it another try.

[This message has been edited by Oklahoma Rose (09-12-2009 04:15 PM).]

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if I am EVer TO unWIND
i’ll HAVE to PUT my NOSE to GRIND
So THAT i MIGHT just KEEP my MIND
No MORE beHIND, no MORE beHIND

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DOn't worry, Rose...I'm patient

Rachel..very good. I see you are paying attention to meter and that's a good thing!

One thing, though...

So THAT i MIGHT just KEEP my MIND

Yes, if I follow your accents, that works well. However, without them being capitalized, I would not have followed them. I would have read...

so that I MIGHT just KEEP my MIND

That's always a tricky area, trying to figure out how someone else will read it. The best rule of thumb is....if there's any chance they will read it differently, change it. You could say, for example,...

so I just might not lose my mind

That can basically be read only one way and solves the problem.

Just consider that at times. Your assignment is fine
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Thank you, good Sir. I will certainly keep that in mind.

Arana Darkwolf

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linda..lovely fairy-tale  

arana..I celebrate your meter breakthrough

shel

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keepsake


she found it there along the ledge
amongst the green between the hedge
it called to her, she let it wedge
it has an edge, it has an edge..

but notes were played into her ear
erasing doubt, erasing fear
the meaning real, the message clear
she holds it dear, she holds it dear..

it tugged at her to take a leap
to find the things that she would reap
she takes the chance that she will weep
it’s hers to keep, it’s hers to keep..

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Absolutely wonderful, shelli.  

xoxoxo

Rachael,

I am so glad that you are working throught meter hell.  It's worth the battle.

Love to you both,
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Very nice, brown eyes Meter is great and the construction excellent.

Could you explain the meaning of the poem to me?
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deer

it's to be interpreted

by the reader...I will

keep the true meaning

just for me  

thanks for approving..

I really like this style.
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Brown-eyed Beauty ~

Shellie, I'm with you! I like this poetic form, as well! It was fun to do! ~ and yours is fabulous!


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Sleep-Time Lullaby


Lay down your head and go to sleep
You’ll dream of moats and castle’s keep
As mermaids sing from water's deep
From waves they peep; from waves they peep

While stars shine down from darkened skies
They comfort those with tired cries
Then duck and smile as comets fly
They whistle by; they whistle by

It’s time to close your weary eyes
The day is done until sun rise
Each morning brings a new surprise
Away night flies; away night flies

So listen to the nighttime sing
The joyful tune that crickets bring
While fire flies create lighted strings
From dreams they spring; from dreams they spring

Lay down your head and go to sleep
You’ll dream of laughing elves that leap
And dance ‘til morning sunlight creeps
To kiss your cheek; to kiss your cheek

-

Alison

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Ok Balladeer! Here is my contribution to your assignment.

Hurtful Words


At first the words had pierced my heart
Her kicks esigned to tear apart
Her ways were clear right from the start
It was her art, it was her art

Her temper tantrums weren’t unseen
The truth be known, she was so mean
She's not one on whom I would lean
She’s not so keen, she’s not so keen

Each vicious word would pierce right through
It seems her words were never true
With her it seems she was so vain
To cause such pain, to cause such pain

Inside this heart I hold the truth
And cannot tolerate untrue
Or even those who are so rude
You must be true, you must be true

Oklahoma Rose


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Alison, what a sweet, gentle spirit you have. This is the perfect poem for me to have read before I slip off to slumber. Linda stretches and yawns with a smile on her face.

Once you post this in Open (which I trust you WILL be doing!!! ), I will be saving it.

Lovely, dear Alison ~ as you yourself are!

Sweet dreams!

~ I know mine will be, sweet poetess!

Linder Lou
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Linda,

May you have sweet dreams .. love you lots.  Thank you for all you bring me.

Oh, and the reason you will not tell what the fairy said when she fell down the well? It's probably not very nice, you know.  

xoxoxo
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