Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
Much, much better!
As far as the syllable accents are concerned, yes ,a dictionary will highlight them with an accent mark in the appropriate places. The best way, however, is simply to read the lines and see if they are the way you would speak in real life. For example....
Home in my room my cage alone
You put the accents here...
HOME in MY room MY cage a-LONE
Is that the way you would pronounce it if you were saying it to someone? I doubt it. I think it would be more like...
HOME in my ROOM my CAGE a-LONE or home IN my ROOM my CAGE a-LONE
The rest of the first stanza is great.
THOUGHTS a-SUN-der IN-to Two ghosts
Almost. The accent wouldn't be on "two". It would read as THOUGHTS a-SUN-der IN-to two GHOSTS. Needs to be changed.
no GOOD can COME from THE con-FLICTS
Almost never will you have an accent on "the". You wouldn't pronounce it that way, either. You do need the accent there to make the sentence work, so change "the" to something else, like "these" or "those" or some other word that IS strong enough to be accented.
The rest of the second stanza is right on.
WHICH one TO choose PAST or PRES-ent
Nope. "To" would not carry an accent, "choose" does, which makes it "WHICH one to CHOOSE PAST or PRES-ent" but then you have two unaccented syllables together (one to) and two accented ones together (choose past). That sentence would have to be reworked.
PAST over PRES-ent IS un-PLEAS-ant
You have one too many syllables here, 9, and you don't show any accent in the word "over". You could simply change over to o'er and that would solve it, otherwise you need to rework it.
Having said all of that, it STILL is a big improvement. You are only hairs off of having everything exact and I'm confident you will make it work.
Read good, rhyming poetry, Look up iambic and trochaic poetry on your search engine. Read the examples they give. Let you mind feel the flow of the lines and the rhythm based on the positioning of the accents. That's great exercise for getting used to how it sounds and how it works.