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Dr.Moose1
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25 posted 08-18-2009 11:10 PM

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Balladeer,
M'friend, surely surrender is not an option.
Beat me to the pulp that I am accustomed to, and then I will know I'm not dealing with an imposter.
Doc

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26 posted 08-18-2009 11:16 PM

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Balladeer'
Most surely surrender's not an option. Beat me to the pulp I've come to expect, and then I'll know you're no imposter.
Doc
Tried to fix the double post without result, my bad, help. Thnxs
Doc

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27 posted 08-18-2009 11:38 PM

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OK, Rachel! Your trochaic is very well done. You're getting the hang of this meter thingy, methinks

I don't care for that last line, though. "Wont I'll be..." just doesn't make a lot of sense to me but, if that's your choice, then so be it.

I admire your perserverance!

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28 posted 08-19-2009 02:29 PM

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Good Sir Balladeer,
I thank you for your compliment and for your constructive criticism. Perhaps some insight into the intent of the use of the word "wont" will be helpful.
The term was meant to be used as saying that I'll be striving for or wanting or dwelling on something as illustrated in Mirriam Webster's definition below:

Main Entry: 1wont
Pronunciation: \ˈwȯnt, ˈw�nt also ˈwənt, ˈw�nt\
Function: adjective
Etymology: Middle English woned, wont, from past participle of wonen to dwell, be used to, from Old English wunian; akin to Old High German won�n to dwell, be used to, Sanskrit vanoti he strives for � more at win

Arana Darkwolf

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29 posted 08-19-2009 06:44 PM

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Yes, I looked that up before I responded. It appeared to me you were trying to say with "Wont I'll be to join you...", a desire to be, not used to be.

As I say...your choice.

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30 posted 08-19-2009 07:59 PM

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You PAID Bobby to say that!!!!

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31 posted 08-19-2009 08:10 PM

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LOL...I most certainly did not, Sir! I am much more honorable than that! ~trying really hard not to giggle~ But I understand why the use of the word, given it's literal deffinition may be disconcerting.

Arana Darkwolf

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