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Marley Sexton
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since 2009-08-06
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0 posted 2009-08-06 04:16 PM



Okay, I started writing poetry about a month ago, just as i started the section of my english GCSE that was to do with poetry, and i'm slowly getting better. But as i read others Poetry on various sites, i find that i seem to be missing something and they flow much better.

So anyway i've added a poem i wrote a week ago, you can be as brutly honest as you wish, maybe you could help me with my Technique, Thanks!

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Bury me.
--
Upon my death,
Bury me please.

Bury me high,
So i Overlook the sky.

Bury me with pride,
So that i may not cry.

Bury me with a stone,
So i may be Known.

Bury me with a precession,
So my death is an accession.

Bury me in peace,
So my pain shalt cease.

Bury me with a dove,
So i may know your love.

Bury me without guilt,
So your life can be rebuilt.

Bury me a tree,
So i may be free.

Bury me Please.

© Copyright 2009 Marley Sexton - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 2009-08-06 07:45 PM


Welcome, Marley, to the site and the workshop. In the poetry workshop we do not critique other's work. We create assignments and grade on how well the assignments are done. You can choose a lesson from the many we have listed here and submit something pertaining to that lesson. If you wish a critique of your poetry, simply post it in the Open forum and request advice....by the way, you have the "do not encourage critiques" marked in your profile. You need to change that if you want critiques or advice.

We hope you enjoy your stay here

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2 posted 2009-08-07 02:14 AM


Hey Marley,

Welcome.  I hope that you join in on the lessons.  They have sure helped me.



Alison

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since 2008-02-28
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Oklahoma USA
3 posted 2009-08-08 12:44 PM


Hi Marley! Welcome to Pip and the workshop. I do hope you enjoy your stay here. You can't go wrong with Balladeer helping you. He is the BEST!
Nan
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4 posted 2009-08-08 04:34 PM


Welcome, Marley - We're always happy to see new versers join our fray.  Bring your quill & tablet and settle in.  You're in for a treat!



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