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0 posted 2009-07-07 04:45 PM


My challenge to you, dear Sir, and any others who may desire to take this on, is to write a Fibonacci Poem in which the last 3 of the 6 lines rhyme. Those of us who are either Dan Brown fans or mathemeticians know that the Fibonacci Sequence is an unending sequence of numbers wherein each number is the sum of its two predecessors. (i.e. 1,1,2,3,5,8). Thus, a Fibonacci Poem is a six line work in which the syllables of each line increase by following the Fibonacci Sequence. I've included my own Fibonacci poem below.

I Am Woman

I
Am
Woman
Delicious
Quite mysterious
And I will keep you curious

Arana Darkwolf

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1 posted 2009-07-07 06:08 PM


I
am
teacher.
Challenge me?
And - poetically??
I'm laughing , hysterically!

(btw, the lessons come from me, although I welcome all suggestions.) I appreciate your enthusiasm!

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2 posted 2009-07-07 06:32 PM


I appreciate your patience and leniency, dear Sir. And I thank you for taking this in good humor. I will be sure not to overstep my bounds again.

Arana Darkwolf

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3 posted 2009-07-07 07:42 PM


Wow, bold indeed you prove you are,
To challenge him to write a poem.
He's the king of ballads and stories told,
This king of words holds our jereboem  

There's not a thing that he can't write
I must say that I think you're mighty brave,
He counts his feet, they rhyme just right,
They cheer for him, and critics rave.

  Okay so I forced it.

psst? A what?

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4 posted 2009-07-07 07:52 PM


Thank you for the accolades, Mysteria! (Now if I can just find out what jereboem means...not even my dictionary knows! )
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5 posted 2009-07-07 09:03 PM


Darn dyslexia!  Jeroboam     My life gets interesting with it I tell you.
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6 posted 2009-07-07 09:21 PM


I unsterdand!
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7 posted 2009-07-07 10:31 PM


Not to answer a question with a question, but... Mysteria, was that "psst? a what?" directed at me?

Arana Darkwolf

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8 posted 2009-07-08 09:10 AM


Rachaelfuchsberger, bold indeed you are. Just like Mysteria said, Balladeer is the best. I don' know of any form Balladeer can't write. He can teach you all there is to know.
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9 posted 2009-07-08 10:00 AM


Mysteria,

I often type "snukes" for "smiles"

snukes and wanders out

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10 posted 2009-07-08 08:13 PM


Sir Balladeer,
I do hope I haven't overstepped so much as to not be welcome to participate in your lessons any more. I also wanted to say that I can't wait for the next one, if I am, indeed, still welcome to join in.

~Rachael

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11 posted 2009-07-09 12:21 PM


Rachel, you are always welcome. Your exuberance is refreshing. One will be forthcoming soon....
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12 posted 2009-07-09 02:19 PM


Rachel, the psst was for Michael   I not only typed the darn word wrong, I had to dig that word up to rhyme with poem, see?  Jeroboam didn't even make sense in the context I used it, and he would know it.  

Funny, I was actually sitting in the bathroom this morning, (I know too much information right?) I looked on the bookshelf and saw Balladeer's book.  I picked it up and started reading, and before I knew it a 1/2 hour had passed.  If you get a chance, read "The Last Carnival."  In fact, if you have any extra cash, I bet he has copies of his book still for sale?

I have read Balladeer's work, but also had the luxury of having heard him recite (from memory) these long, absolutely perfectly rhymed stories of his, and you can not find a better teacher anywhere.

I can't speak for him, but I am sure he welcomes eager students like yourself with open arms.  He gave up on me, but there is still hope for you.  

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13 posted 2009-07-09 09:08 PM


Mysteria, I would NEVER give up on you! As long as there is a "da-dum" alive somewhere in the world, you will always hold a special place in my heart

(I'm picturing your reading my words on the pot. Quite a visual!! )

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14 posted 2009-08-11 08:04 PM


Whoa, wait.  Balladeer has a book?  I guess I shouldn't be surprised...

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15 posted 2009-08-12 12:25 PM


If I may be even bolder...8)

I've posted a fib poem here some time ago, they've been around for a while. How about the deriving syllable-count with the Collatz conjecture? (see note below the poem.)


A MATHEMATICIAN TO HIS SON

We must take a logical approach:

statistics show that triangles multiply, we know men do find naked singular individuals in their beds.  

It sometimes happen that the naked one is their product;

that too can divide a pair,

causing then an exponentional rise in sexual activity for both ex-partners

with the lowest common denominator.  

We can but conjecture as to how the proximity of geometrical structures fire up the whole sensory apparatus, and

jealousy-induced behaviours  have proved poor subjects for our studies.

They confound all intelligent reasoning, they demand metaphysical methods; those impurities are best left to obtuse philosophers to square off over - wash your hands of such puny variables.

Notwithstanding those base elements that invariably set couples at odd, it remains your duty,

my dear son, to find a mate and multiply your kind.

No need to abase yourself in medieval rituals, of when  forever united meant an odd five years before one or both would be taken by plague or war.

Proving heaven a myth has been our true salvation indeed, no need to endure

company of one woman forever.

Choose genetically:

a foreign woman well versed in the arts of cooking and breeding.

Go, multiply,

and get

lost.

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The syllable-count sequence is derived by the "Collatz conjecture" rules, i.e. divide even numbers by two, multiply odd numbers by 3 and add 1. Whatever number you start with, and no matter how large, you'll always come back to one. The syllable-count sequence above is
9 - 28 - 14 - 7 - 22 - 11 -  34 - 17 - 52 - 26 - 13 - 40 - 20 - 10 - 5 -16 - 8 - 4 - 2 - 1

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16 posted 2009-08-12 01:46 PM


It's an interesting syllable count but I find nothing poetic in it. Poetry is more than just using set amounts of syllables. Yes, I know free-versers will say anything can be called poetry but I have found that good free verse  employs some form of either meter, assonance or some other poetic tool to set it apart from just conversation. I can't find that here.
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