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Septolet it Be!

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0 posted 07-05-2009 10:16 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

As a treat for all the free-versers and rhymers who want to try it, let's see some septolets!


The Septolet is a poem consisting of seven lines containing fourteen words with a break in between
the two parts.Both parts deal with the same thought and create a picture.

Lion
moving swiftly
across the plain,
most intent.

Antelope
grazing contently
on his meal.

Copyright 2003 Crystal Rose
Prowling,
Lion woman
Seducer of men.

Trembling heart
Naked, heat
Rising from skin,
Ecstasy!

Copyright 2004 Megan Lutz
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1 posted 07-06-2009 03:37 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Flying
bouncing off sealskin
feet kicking
Eskimos higher

Eyes scanning
the sea
seeking whale

-

Alison
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Alison,
Nice picture, easy to visualize.
Doc

Measure
mix , muddle
Crack, crush and clink!

Concoctions,
cold and subtle.
Ahhh...
Umbrella drinks!
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words
caressing
inner thoughts
beneath the shedding of

it was you
roomed
in mind/mine


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Thank you, Doc.  I love the umbrella drinking.

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Hands
So rough
Touching all of me

My soul
Is trembling
In sheer
Ecstacy

Arana Darkwolf

[This message has been edited by rachaelfuchsberger (07-06-2009 03:18 PM).]

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I knew this would be too easy for my all-stars.

Moose, yours is brilliant and you even made it rhyme....whatta guy!

Maureen, your wistful and romantic side fits this style very well..

Rachel, you certainly have a lot of "hands-on"  poetry...and I like it!

Alison, yours is also  great. I confess I'm at a loss as to the picture your first half is painting. Help the feeble-minded out???
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It's about the Eskimo "blanket" toss.  They jump on sewn sealskin with handles and people move the sealskin up and down by the handles -- kinda like a trampoline.

Eskimo would look for whale as they were tossed in the air.  As they jump higher, they kick with their legs to gain more elevation.

I'll do another that is easier to see.

I also put a poem on the thread for the last assignment.

Thank you!



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Oars
forming silent
ripples on water.

Breezes
provide relief
when summer days
grow hotter

.

Dogs
bark hysterically
eager to escape
the house.

The moose,
with babies,
ignores them.

-

Alison


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Thank you, Sir. I am currently obsessed with my girlfriend's hands and how they are calloused and a bit rough, but she can touch me so gently sometimes that I almost want to cry. Good, happy tears, but still.

~Rachael (aka Arana)
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Of course! The Eskimo blanket toss!!! Why didn't I think of that?

Thank God! I thought there was some nasty giant Eskimo up there wearing sealskin boots, kicking smaller Eskimos up in the air...thanks for setting it straight!
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laughs

Now that would be another poem, Balladeer, my friend.

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Okay teacher, Sir! Please forgive me for being late. But, here is my little scribble for this challenge.

Emotions
Felt within
A sensitive heart
For those in need

Reaching out
To them

[This message has been edited by Oklahoma Rose (07-08-2009 07:58 PM).]

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Thanks for joining in, Rose. You got the word count right but don't forget the seven line part
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Ok, I see I missed that. I'll right another one.
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                 illinois
                corn leaves
                bend on the
               summer breeze

                stalks grow
                 knee~high
                  by july


~shel  

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Excellent, miss! Being from the cornfields of Missouri, I can picture it perfectly. Well done!
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Ok Balladeer, Sir! Here is my contribution. Good, bad or indifferent. I attempted to reword the other one to make it fit.


Deep emotions
Felt within
A heart
Sensitive to one

In need
Of a
Friend
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Now you're cooking, Rose...excellent!
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Awwww, thank you Balladeer, my friend.
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I enjoyed reading all the Septolets above!!!
Now I will attempt one myself. Gosh, I should have been participating in these workshops when I first joined pip! There are so many forms to learn!!!

Butterfly
~ fluttering, flitting,
flower to flower.
Summer day.

Oriole
singing cheerily
from the treetop.

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (07-12-2009 02:23 PM).]

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Linda,

It's pretty amazing, isn't it.  I am so glad that you have joined us.  You are one of my favorite poets here, you know.

xoxoxo
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Very nice, Angel....love the way you used alliteration in the first stanza. Welcome!!
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Good morning, Alison! Trying to put my thoughts into proper poetic form will be challenging for a 'free-for-all' writer like myself. ~ But I'm up for the challenge! ~ I think!

Thank you for the warm welcome ~ and the kind words! I feel the same way about you and your writing!

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Balladeer ~

Thank you! I know that some of the poetic forms that you are teaching your students will be more difficult to write than the Septolet. I rather enjoyed writing this one. However, the Trilonnet is a horse of a different colour, so to speak! lol
 
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