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Balladeer
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0 posted 06-24-2009 09:06 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


Ok, pupils. You seem to have done well with the etherees so let's step it up a notch and do something never done before! (at least I can't find one)

We'll call it an acrosteree. Give me an acrostic etheree, either single or double, where the acrostic describes the content of the poem.

Are we having fun yet?
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!


1 posted 06-24-2009 11:15 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Oh yeah.  Yep.  Sure am.  Uh huh.  Nod, Nod



Actually and honestly, I am!
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2 posted 06-24-2009 12:16 PM       View Profile for Oklahoma Rose   Email Oklahoma Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Oklahoma Rose

Oh yes! Hmmmm, surely I can do this one. I will see what I can do, Sir Balladeer!

That double one would sure be a challenge. Maybe I will give that one a try, too. After the single one.
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Balladeer,
Is this where I'm supposed to say something
about great minds thinking alike? Or, could this all be just coincidence ? Hmmm...
Doc
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4 posted 06-24-2009 09:19 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

The great minds think alike gets my vote, Doc
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5 posted 06-24-2009 09:42 PM       View Profile for Oklahoma Rose   Email Oklahoma Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Oklahoma Rose

This isn't as easy as I thought, Sir Balladeer!
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6 posted 06-25-2009 10:50 AM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

I'll
Take no
More delays
Although they wait
You know it's my aim
And so this I must say
Poems I will butcher and maim
Por favore, once more m'sensai
Encore, encore, and encore again
And amore' to my fans I would send
Righty-o though I show a facial tic
Twisted so would appear you know who
Has more than one screw loose to claim
And gears quite likely to slip
The essence of the fool
In this diatribe
Has now been set
And once more
Vents all
Ey?
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7 posted 06-25-2009 02:04 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I
Amble,
Meander,
Along paths of
Biggity words and
Loquacious syllables.
Umpteen vowel sounds writhe as if
Enigmas seek more clarity.
Sentience  conversations spill over,
Tongue-tied side-liners who are envious,
Regretting verbal inabilities.
Echoes bounce off those with no voices.
And I communicate with ease
Keeping the word-stream flowing
Talking of all I see
And all things I feel
Loving how words
Knit stories
Ever
Real

-

Alison
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Dr. Moose, you are fantastic. I remember you from way back when.

And Alison, my dear friend, I knew you would get it. You never cease to amaze me. You always do so well.
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Moose, it cetainly appears that you did! thank you for your unique talent and sense of humor.

Alison...what can I say? You made that look so easy. Your acrostic was perfect and fitted magnificently with the content of the poem. I don't think I have any more to   teach you at all!!
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10 posted 06-25-2009 11:32 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I think so .. let's revisit Villanelles since you were out after you assigned them. Okay?

Thank you mucho much.

PS - I could always dredge up the (now) despised rooster poem! laughs
A
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Oklahoma Rose,
Thank you for saying so, I remember you too.
Doc

Balladeer,
Thank you sir for keeping me "mentally challenged", though there are those who would say that it comes naturally.
Doc

Alison,
Very nice piece of work, it rolls along so smoothly that if you weren't looking for the acrostic, you'd never notice it. That, to me, exemplifies this form.
Doc
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12 posted 06-26-2009 07:55 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

The Last Ten Years
.
.
.

I
Took to
Using thought,
Relenting un-
Necessary stress;
Endless torment of the
Demands that life has thrown me.
Senseless, and meaningless trials that
Included the taking care of an
Xtremely emotional and "once loved"
Threat to my very existence of late.
Yet ties that bind continue to hold
Through the many years of sharing
One another's memories.
Day to day hoping is
All one can do, for
Yesterday's gone.
And each day's
Newness
Dawns...


M
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13 posted 06-29-2009 05:29 AM       View Profile for Oklahoma Rose   Email Oklahoma Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Oklahoma Rose

Okay Balladeer! Sorry it's taken me so long. Good, bad or indifferent, here is my contribution to this assignment. Hope it is atleast half way good.

You Never Know


Stand
Up and
Meet the world
Making friends smile
Encouraging words
Reaches out to us all

Do not hesitate to give
A little of your time to one
You may never know how much it helps
So make a point to reach out to someone

Oklahoma Rose

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14 posted 06-29-2009 04:31 PM       View Profile for rachaelfuchsberger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rachaelfuchsberger

I'm confused....what's an acrostic?

Arana Darkwolf

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Nicely done, Maureen!! (and happy birthday).

Rose, you are always surprising. I thought you may have a problem with this one but you came up with an excellent poem and one that shows your kind nature and love for humanity. Very well done!


Rachel, I'll give you this one but one of the reasons this is a workshop is that you have to research. If there a word or label you don't know, just look it up in your search engine and you will remember it better.

An acrostic is when the first letters of each line, read downward, create words of their own.
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Thank you, Sir. Much appreciated.

Arana Darkwolf

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Them Gently Rough Hands

Touch
Hotly
Each inch of
My hungry bod
Gruffly but loving
Enticing my passion
Nightly rushing toward me
Tasting your wild hunger for me
Languidly longing just to caress
Your damsel in a passionate distress
Roughly but oh so gently you come
Out into the night, filled with love
Undertaking your mission
Getting in position
Holding me so gently
Holding me so rough
And I know there’s
Naught I can
Do to
Sate

Arana Darkwolf

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Thanks, Michael,  I try not to count those years  anymore,  but  it  was the only theme I could think of at the time. I hope you are on the mend~~

M
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Thank you very much, Balladeer! I'm glad you like it. I'll try to do a double one, too. Just don't hold your breath on it. You might pass out. LOL!
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20 posted 07-01-2009 07:16 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

damsel in passionate distress...roughly but gently....a lot of nice lines and comparisons here, Arana. Even the word "them" in the title instead of the normal "those" adds a flavor to the poem and paints a more vivid picture of the people and surroundings.

In other words....I LIKE IT! You did a fine job with it, miss.
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Thank you, Sir. I was quite proud of this one almost immediately. Although, I am still struggling with meter. I've taken some notes on it, but putting it into practice is quite a bit more complicated than I thought it would be.

Arana Darkwolf

 
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