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0 posted 06-10-2009 06:09 PM

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Ok, me hearties. Time for a little mental exercise. Give me a poem, style your choice, which contain the names of the following:

2 birds
2 colors
2 veggies
2 meats
2 articles of clothing

Shouldn't be any problem, right? Oh, one more thing. The names you use of the following must have a different meaning than the above classifications. For example:

cardinal - religious leader
seeing red
being corny
being a ham
she makes me pant

The words need to relate to a different meaning. Use your bean!

By the way, it needs to be a good poem, good meter, good flow, good rhymes for those who choose to do so. Count those syllables!

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1 posted 06-10-2009 08:11 PM

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Now, I was all into this challenge until you demanded a syllable count (and you didn't even give us a format!!!)

I'm smiling though...

good to see yuh, grinnin' again.

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2 posted 06-10-2009 08:15 PM

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Style's your choice, serenity gal. Free versers can disregard the syllable counts so go for it! ;0

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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 06-11-2009 12:29 AM

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Once

as a lark she used to jay-walk high
over trestles; whispered blacked-out blues;
peppered night dreams; squashed the fear to fly

Now

youth gone, she simply soaks her hot dogs
reads stale spam while nibbling cat food chew
shorts - and shoos - her dreams in amber fog

-

Alison

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4 posted 06-11-2009 03:08 AM

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The Missionary's Groceries

The penguin was habitual--
she was attentive to her flock.
The raptor was attentive too
and inventoried stock.

Black on white
contrasted --they
melded
into shades of gray...

an onion peeled
the days away
to nothingness
like artichokes

with such sweet salt-pickled ham
ground to little pieces

(spam?)

in the spool of street reveal
decked with speckles of the Ram...

cottons breathed "Egyptian"
within the folds of her caftan
laced with lust of the silkworm
imported from Japan.

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5 posted 06-11-2009 03:13 AM

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*shrug*?

I may be back again.

Intriguing challenge, oh-m'deer!

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6 posted 06-11-2009 08:42 PM

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Alison. that is more fantastic than anything I imagined getting from this lesson. You came up with some very unique examples I hadn't even considered! Nicely done!

Serenity gal, I have no doubt it is spectacular (because everything you do is). As soon as I can decipher it, I'll have more to say

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7 posted 06-11-2009 10:09 PM

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You made my evening! You know, sometimes I feel like I am making progress and I think of you.

The spam was for you! I missed you lots.

Alison

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8 posted 06-11-2009 10:25 PM

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Oh thank god.

quote:
Free versers can disregard the syllable counts so go for it!

I might have a chance to contribute!

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9 posted 06-12-2009 12:14 PM

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I bat the roosters from the tower and crow auspicious news
Cut paper dolls with pinking shears and shed this cloak of blues
Let hope which sprouts eternal rocket bad news on it's way
No beef have I with fortune for it smiles on us this day

I'll not be one to buffalo my fellow pipsters, see
A sugar coat's no antidote, what I'd prescribe would be
In celebration of the fact that our friend has returned
we all drop trou' and shoot the moon, this meeting stands adjourned!

Woo hoo, it's time to par-tay, don't just sit there scratchin' heads
A cause for celebration like this calls for some good meds!
"Two articles of clothing" let me see, who can we crown?
Yo Balladeer ol' buddy are you up to gettin' down?

I sure hope so 'cuz this classroom has been just about the pits
Without you here to guide us I was 'bout to call it quits
The pattern juggler stole my pen, the yellow jesters' strings
got tangled 'round my ankles with the Black Queens' underthings!

And though in my exuberance my thought train jumped the track,
This much I say for all of us, it's good to have you back.

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (06-14-2009 08:58 AM).]

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10 posted 06-13-2009 10:06 PM

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Ya know, Doc Moose, I am a fan - and I second, third, fourth the sentiments of your poem.

I tip my hat to my two favorite Workshop men!

...

Alison

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11 posted 06-14-2009 09:00 AM

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Thank you Alison, you are most kind.
Doc

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12 posted 06-14-2009 09:59 AM

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Ah, Moose, your mind's a special place that really can't be beet
You're nuts but you can get a smile from everyone you meat.
A fourteen carrot cranium that seldom ever sleeps
A field of corn is what your fertile acres sow and reap.

I revel in the succotash you heap upon my plate
So lettuce drink a toast but just don't offer me a date.
They say that academia is what smart people do
So call me Mackademia 'cause I'm a nut like you.

Thanks for the return greeting, Doc. I realize that no challenge I come up with will even slow you down but it's always fun watching you work.

No shoot the moon, though, please - stomach is still a little queasy

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13 posted 06-14-2009 12:20 PM

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Quote: Free versers can disregard the syllable counts so go for it!

Can Dadaists give it go too?

lol

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14 posted 06-14-2009 09:34 PM

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Balladeer, my most favorite poet, I am so glad to see you back. I have missed you.

I'm afraid I can't even begin to match the expertise of the others on this.

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15 posted 06-15-2009 12:17 PM

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Balladeer,
Lol @ your poetic reply, and if you're not quite ready for a group moonshot, we'll re-schedule. Be well.
Doc

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16 posted 06-15-2009 03:08 PM

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Balladeer Sir, it is so good to see you back. Just one question? How long do we have to complete the assignment?

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17 posted 06-15-2009 06:38 PM

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Rose, you have as long as you need. When you come up with something you are willing to share with us, we will be here to accept it. I know that you try your best in everything you do and I respect you for it.

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18 posted 06-15-2009 07:20 PM

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One more question? Do I need to use these words in this order, or can they be mixed up?

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19 posted 06-22-2009 12:24 PM

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Atempted this Mr. B.. Hope it's right.

Lace Bunting posted in Open #45.

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20 posted 06-22-2009 03:42 PM

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Thank you, Jim. I appreciate your joining in!

As Moose will tell you, however, I am a vicious taskmaster!

The poem itself I like quite a bit.....but

After checking Webster's and the Cambridge dictionaries, I cannot find anywhere where bower is a bird type.
You uses of blouse and jeans refers to clothing in your poem. The assignment was to use clothing words in ways that do NOT refer to clothing. for example, "I hate the way my dog PANTS" or "The cop COLLARED" the crook". Jerky, lettuce and tomato still refers to food in your poem. I nees something like, "The car moved in a JERKY manner" and my hot TOMATO next to me was unhappy".

got it?

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21 posted 06-22-2009 07:56 PM

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Ahh...see my error...will have to see what I can do. As for Bowerbirds...surprised I am...anyway, as an example, go here...
j.
http://creagrus.home.montereybay.com/bowerbirds.html

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22 posted 06-22-2009 09:10 PM

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I see! Always great to have my knowledge expanded...thank you.

Perhaps Webster's and Cambridge doesn't carry that because they don't recognize bower as an acceptable short form of bowerbird. They need to have their knowledge expanded, too!

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23 posted 08-09-2009 04:56 PM

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(Ok, Mr. Balladeer, here goes nothing!)

    Taking Lessons


We two, Jean and I,
Clarinetists on the rise,
Took lessons in the city,
Had our teenage ties
(seventy�s halter tops)

Neither of us had dated
But heard of those who did,
We Chicks, cognizant of the bases
But not of where the �shortstop� lived!

Our love lives were �The Pits�  to tell
When asked of our good times
The mocking birds jeered at us,
Naive of sexual climes.
(blushing faces easily red)

Many cruised the drive-ins,
Giving  Falcons extra spinnage,
Green,  they looked at us,
When we turniped in Mustang (64) vintage.

Their eyes once had pigeon-holed
The perfect size and date,
Yet, were over-hauled by my auto,
Haltered deerly by the bait.

   ~miscellanea~

Gee, this exercise was fun.  Good one.

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24 posted 08-09-2009 09:25 PM

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Very good! It reads like you had fun doing it and you did it well (no points for deerly, though)

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