Let the Triples Roll On!!!

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50 posted 09-08-2009 05:55 PM

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Yanno, Linda, there was a time you were my favorite student. I would wait anxiously for your assignments to come in and then chuckle with glee as I ripped them apart. Meter? Horrible! (chuckle, chuckle) Syllable counts? All over the map!! (What fun!) Oh, the joy you brought to this old heart, dissecting your poems like formaldehyde frogs.

But now....NOW!...every poem is exact! The syllable counts are perfect, the meter is a work of art, and there are no unnecessary words thrown in to cheat or fudge. Where did I go wrong????? Now, instead of berating you, all I can do is sit back and applaud....and I do!

You have blossomed into a wonderful poet, m'lady. Your possibilities are endless...

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52 posted 09-09-2009 12:25 AM

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Oh, my gosh, Balladeer! You really had me going there for the first part of your response! You certainly do have a 'rye' sense of humour! lol

I'm pleased that you are well enough to wade through a villanelle with a critical eye when you are still recuperating from your surgery. Thank you!

As for the last half of your response, it put such a broad smile on my face that it had my cherubic cheeks hurting! I truly appreciate your kind words. ~ I repeat, in the last half! lol Now I know that there is hope for me as a poet. I'll keep working at the craft and developing my skills.

You are a very fine teacher and you have been pulling things out of me that I didn't know I had!

Thank you for the guidance, encouragement and for believing in me. I hope I don't disappoint you after all this praise!

Goodness me! this reads like an acceptance speech! Well, it's because I'm so pleased that I 'done good'! As you know, I find french vanillas a 'B' to write!

Giving you a warm, healing hug and a big kiss on the cheek (next to your nose!!!).

Linda

Shellie ~ You're a real sweetie pie! Thank you!

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53 posted 09-24-2009 09:44 PM

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Oh, Deer! I've been getting out of sync with your lessons! First I wrote a Trilonnet but then you changed that lesson to a Villonet. So then I started writing one of those. I didn't like that form very much so I was pleased that you decided to scrap the Villonet lesson. So then I thought I'd write another Villanelle in its place! ~ But, alas, I now see that you are asking us to write a Hexonneta ~ which I will most likely try as well. LOL

Oh, well. I'm having fun! ~ as long as you don't mind me bumping down your new lesson posts!

Anyhoo, here is my latest attempt at a Villanelle.

Farewell, Dear Knight

Farewell, dear knight, I best be on my way.
~ For greater heights than thee, I now aspire.
I take mine leave for fear what I might say.

Thy wanton ways deceived and did betray.
Along with trust, away flew passion�s fire.
Farewell, dear knight, I best be on my way.

The time has passed for consummate display.
Thy heart be worn on sleeve of rogue attire.
I take mine leave for fear what I might say.

I kept mine vows to honour and obey.
No longer will ye be mine kingly sire.
Farewell, dear knight, I best be on my way

I wish thee well ~ and for thy peace, I pray
~ For thou hast lost true love for loin desire.
I take mine leave for fear what I might say.

With heavy heart, I leave without delay
~ To start anew in nearby Devon shire.
Farewell, dear knight, I best be on my way.
I take mine leave for fear what I might say.

LLD

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