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Teach me....didacticly

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0 posted 01-07-2009 11:49 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Didactic is defined as" conveying instruction: teaching some moral lesson. Moral, which originally meant merely "customary", has grown to involve the distinction between what is right and what is wrong. This is a subjective distinction, and each person developes his or her own code, developed by the interaction of his own teachings and his own desires. Thus the "moral" which constitutes the poem or verses, or which is emphasized in them, will be what the poet wants the reader to learn and believe and follow.

Some examples of didactic poetry...

"Lives of great men all remind us
We can make our lives sublime,
And, departing, leave behind us
Footprints on the sands of time;
Footprints that perhaps another
Sailing o'er life's solemn main,
A forlorn and shipwrecked brother
Seeing, shall take heart again.   -  Longfellow (A Psalm of Life)

Alcohol is like a snake:
It can't be kept in bounds;
It makes of one a perfect wreck,
A wondering vagrant hound.      -  James Byron Elmore

A little learning is a dangerous thing;
Drink deep, or taste not the Pierian spring.
There shallow draughts intoxicate the brain
And drinking largely sobers us again.
All seems infected that the infexted spy,
And all looks yellow to the jaundiced eye.    - Alexander Pope  (Essay on Criticism)


So what bit of wisdom would you like to impart to your fellow pipsters? What moral lesson would you like to deliver? Teach us!!!!

As always, use any style but remain true to that style with proper construction.

(no, Dr. Moose, you CANNOT use "a waist is a terrible thing to mind". )
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1 posted 01-09-2009 10:44 AM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Balladeer,
A challenging assignment, I thought about this for a couple days before it hit me how I might be able work this assignment and still maintain  humorous content. True life often works best.
Doc

Quite a long time ago
was a buddy of mine
seemed to get himself shot
where the sun doesn't shine

Through a window he fled
from a mans' jealous rage
but not quickly enough
for that ol' shotguns' gauge

And the scars are still there
deeper than wounded pride
so I'm told  anyway
( not for me to have eyed!)

Yet I'm mindful the same
of that lesson in life
with no ifs, ands, nor butts
'bout another mans' wife

[This message has been edited by Dr.Moose1 (01-09-2009 11:33 AM).]

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2 posted 01-09-2009 11:04 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Doc posted his assignment and I just saw the assignment.  Sheese, would someone wake me up when the teacher comes in, please?

And, Moose Man, I love the poem!

A
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3 posted 01-09-2009 11:35 AM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Alison,
Lol, I was wondering where you were off to.
Glad you liked.
Doc
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4 posted 01-10-2009 07:03 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Doc, you belong in the rear of the class....'cause no one writes about rears better than you!

Nicely done...and a lesson for us all not to get behind in our endeavors in life.

I had a feeling you would get to the bottom of this assignment very easily
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5 posted 01-11-2009 09:11 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

A Teacher's View

I promise not to scold you but
in parenting I find
that busy ness keeps many from
the nurturing in kind.

Too many let replacement of...
devices in their hold
when children really need the touch
and limits to help mold.

Their future lives depend upon
their childhood in support.
Rather than mechanical means
that leave them falling short.


M
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6 posted 01-11-2009 09:27 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

Whethering Heights


Whether 'tis or weather 'tisn't
there's one thing that I know
I try the best to dress for it
in rain or in the snow.

With all those new found gadgets that
can read  the skies above
why is it that I dress the wrong
when listening to terms of...

Partly sun or mostly clouds hmmm
the days are both the same.
Maybe this or it's slightly that...
Methinks a whether game!

M


(this one is probably more of a complaint than a lesson learned that would be moral...but if you live in this area of the states you can  expect the wrong weather report most of the time!)
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7 posted 01-11-2009 09:33 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

That was a really cute one Doc~~

M
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8 posted 01-11-2009 11:17 AM       View Profile for Oklahoma Rose   Email Oklahoma Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Oklahoma Rose

Quote from Balladeer!

"I'm afraid there is a lack of interest, m'lady"


A lack of interest teacher sir
isn't exactly what I have
It's just that I don't want to look
so dense in front of the class

As you know I have missed out
on a whole lot of the lessons
So, when you say apply all, that
we have learned in each session

I am at a total loss as to what
those lessons might have been
Since I wasn't in the class each time
to know what the lesson was back then

If you do recall Dear Sir
I never did complete the assignment given
Just before Christmas time arrived
So, I hope I am forgiven
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9 posted 01-11-2009 10:25 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Maureen, your Teacher's View is excellent!  It is well-written and presents an excellent point. In this day of working mothers and more limited parent-child relations, one must remember the importance of family bonding. Saying, "Here's your Nintendo - go play" does not take the place of parenting. Wish more parents would remember what parenting is really supposed to involve.

As far as you other poem, be glad you don't live here. We plan our golf and picnics on the days the weathermen predict 90% rain - because we know it will be bright and sunny!
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10 posted 01-11-2009 10:29 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Rose, you NEVER have to worry about looking dense. You are among FRIENDS!!!

I admire any lesson you attempt and I will always be here to help you in any way, as will everyone else. Since you have been here, your poetry has improved greatly and I'm sure it will continue to do so because you are not a quitter and you have a strong desire to do well.  Forgive you? I applaud you and will always be in your corner....believe it.
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11 posted 01-12-2009 07:59 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Balledeer,
Ty M'friend. Ten years an' I still don't know how to run these things, darn but it's been alot of fun.
Doc
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12 posted 01-13-2009 02:22 AM       View Profile for Marc-Andre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marc-Andre

To challenge myself further, I wrote this with internally-rhyming alexandrines. That's my second attempt at alexandrine couplets, feedback will be greatly appreciated. Thanks for reading, Mark.


The Pentateuch spoke wrong: so I address the throng
To tell them all’s not done; a sabbath God took none;
He’s been here all along, the birds still sing his song
In space he’ll be colon, when all of us are gone.

“It ended on day six; the plants the dogs the hicks”
A lie, to you I say: It still goes on today;
Still chromosomes commix, a second he won’t nix
As newborns see the day, it’s like that everyday.

He still creates right now, he's in each Cupid’s bow
Each time you life deface, you’re spitting in God’s face;
Whenever you would row, whenever there’s a pow
Creation of our race, you bring down to disgrace.

And when you save a life, then your rewards be rife
For they were made by God, the fly the king the bawd;
So do forego all strife, and find yourself a wife
In your bed life belaud, and angels shall applaud.
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13 posted 01-13-2009 04:08 AM       View Profile for Claira   Email Claira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Claira

Hello Teacher,

This is one of the first full poems I've written in about 6 months, so please be gentle

Boundaries in Cambodia

I know a man from far away
Who thought he’d stay that extra day.
That to many, was no surprise
But just the start of his demise.

The first month he drank only beer,
Much stronger here and not so dear.
One month on he was gulping gin
But that isn't what “done `im in”

Progressed to smoking herbal grass,
A few tokes here: his life a blast.
For him this wasn’t quite enough.
As he was feeling way too tough!

Then someone said “Ere this is nice”
That is the night he first tried Ice.
A dirty drug, it must be said,
Leaves you ruined; or often dead.

Still this fool stayed an extra day!
Instead of getting far away.
While he was getting in this state,
Confirming the future of his own fate.

He jumped upon his trusty steed
And flipped thru’ gears to gain some speed.
I’m sure that you can guess the rest
But let’s just say, his head’s a mess.

Yeah I know, need to work on the Leaves you ruined or often dead line. Claira

[This message has been edited by Claira (01-14-2009 07:51 AM).]

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14 posted 01-14-2009 02:21 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Claira,

I love your poem!

A
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15 posted 01-14-2009 02:31 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Poetic Flatulence


If your homework isn’t turned in on time,
don’t attempt “the dog ate my poem” whine.
You’ll have to wait until your mutt poops
and bring in your poem on a pooper scoop.

If you are late for your poetry class
you’ll have to sit behind the guy with gas.
It’s a fact that is proven true
you’ll hold your breath ‘til you turn blue.

So set your clock early, and get there on time
or pray that you won’t be late and get behind
that guy with gas.  He’ll grin and toot
and Balladeer won’t give a hoot!


Alison

[This message has been edited by Alison (01-15-2009 10:58 AM).]

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Thanks Alison, loving your poem too, we will have to make sure we both sit at the front of class so Mr Gasman is behind us
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17 posted 01-14-2009 10:03 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Hello, Marc-Andre!  Let me say you have really done a brilliant job here. Alexandrines are not the easiest things to do in the world, especiall the internal rhyming and you pulled off the a-a-b-b-a-a-b-b in an excellent manner with perfect meter. Not only that, your message is right on and thoughts to live by.

BUT.......

Colon threw me off. I had to consult three dictionaries to find the meaning that fits (I think!)  
I still don't understand the hicks reference, unless you are saying God finished creating southerners on day six!
Last line of the second stanza you rhyme day and day
The "wherever you would row" threw me also because I naurally used the pronounciation for "row your boat', and got lost when I got to pow. That's a weak line to me.
Second to the last line, the "do" is there obviously to maintain that syllable count only.

It may sound like I'm picking on you a bit and....and I probably am because I recognize your talent, your hard work and your dedication to your work and I want you to be the best you can be. You have some great potential, sir.
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18 posted 01-14-2009 10:07 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Claira, that was really good! it was original, a good story and with one exception (the last line in the second to last stanza) the rhythm and meter was wonderful. You did an excellent job, miss
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19 posted 01-14-2009 10:10 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Alison, your poem was a real gas! Some may think it smells but I think it shows great fartitude and the message is perfect.....don't be late for class!!!

No butts about it....
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20 posted 01-15-2009 03:23 AM       View Profile for Marc-Andre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marc-Andre

Heartfelt thanks to you, Balladeer, for taking the time to write such a thorough feedback. I feel privileged to have you "pick on me," it really helps me to learn. You've got the "hicks" reference right, what I mean to say is that some talk as God's creation was totally completed on day six. Perhaps a bit forced though, I needed the rhyme...As for "colon" I used the same meaning as that of my native tongue, French. I tend to forget that some of those words, while common in French, can be obscure in English, at least semantically-speaking. Your feedback here is invaluable. I don't know whether I will rework that poem though, I am currently working on a piece with the trochaic octometer and the rhyming scheme of Poe's "The Raven", quite demanding but a valuable exercise, I think. Have a marvelous day! Mark
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21 posted 01-16-2009 03:10 AM       View Profile for Claira   Email Claira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Claira

Thank you Balladeer, I'm sure I speak for everyone here when I say that your time, help and patience are very much appreciated.
I will try and work on the offending line, I'm also not sure if there is maybe more to be done on this one, I think there are a couple  more points I could put into the story.

Once again many thanks for your help and encouragement.

 
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