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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India 
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Hi Deer Sir, My late assignment submission from the last year. Wishing one and all my friends at Pip a wonderful poetic year ahead. Provencally Working Worker: May I come in Sir, May I please? (This morning you know, I lost your draw keys.) Boss: Please come in and take your seat. (Come in you fool, you are such a big cheat.) Worker: May I know the reason you called? (You look so mean, old and you are all bald) Boss: Nothing much to say, how was day? (For your misdeeds, a heavy price you’re going pay) Worker: Yes, my day was just great. (You are my boss, it is my bad fate) Boss: How are things at work? (A big cut, you can expect in your perk) Worker: My work is just going very fine. (I wish right now, wish I could go ahead and resign) Boss: How are your co-workers treating you? (I know you are one of those animals from the zoo) Worker: Well, they are all such a nice bunch. (They all wish I would give you a real hard punch) Boss: How is your health these days? (I am getting tired with your lazy ways) Worker: I am not doing so well, you know. (Everything you assign to me, I like to say a big no) Boss: Have you been coming to work on time? (Not being on time to my office is an unforgivable crime) Worker: Yes, I always sign in early everyday. (That’s a secretive deal between me and Ray) Boss: Are you satisfied and happy with your job? (You know the reason behind my entire probe) Worker: Very much, I am so happy and glad. (You want me to say the truth, I am very sad) Boss: You lost my draw keys today, didn't you? (You are big looser in my eyes, in my view) Worker: Well, yes I did loose them, I am sorry Sir. (Haven’t you made any mistakes, mistakes do occur) Boss: Make sure you don’t repeat this again. (All my advices to you will only go down the drain) Worker: I am so sorry, it will not happen again. (I will tell your wife that you are going around with Jane) Boss: You may leave now and take care. (Next time this happens, you lose your job. I swear) Worker: Thank you Sir, I will take your leave. (I am really going to call your wife this eve) @Prasad.N 06th Jan 2009 "Hardwork pays in the long run" [This message has been edited by Prasad Nataraj (01-08-2009 06:31 AM).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LOL! Nice touch, sir! You set up a very good scenario between boss and worker and the "unspoken" comments are terrific! I salute you, good sir.  There are, of course, a few English errors which I would be happy to help you with, if you like, but, for a fellow who does not have English as a primary language, I think you do very well and I admire your afforts. |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Hi Deer Sir, Thank you so much for those kinds words on my humble attempt. Yes, surely let me know the errors and i will work on them. Thank you once again for your time.  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Prasad, Lol, I also think your "take" on this was excellently done. The spoken/unspoken thoughts worked very well, and being that English is obviously not your primary language made your accomplishment that much more pertinant. I myself, could not concieve of trying to write a poem in your native dialect, although as I age, I may try to expand my horizons. Well done. Doc |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
I loved this scenerio. There are a lot of things I WISH I could say to my boss. Well done! And I like the English mistakes, just goes to show you that in any language a boss can be a jerk! haha Remember me with a smile on your face, or please don't remember me at all. |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Very nicely done, Prasad And quite funny. Ditto with Lucie, the English mistakes do add charm to your piece. I would only correct where it would improve the meter, e.g. today morning > this morning. I speak several languages myself, but can only write poetry in English. I admire both your efforts and the result. |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Thank you so much Dr.Moose for those wonderful comments on my attempt. I guess, you will one day try Indian dialects too. That should be fun. Prasad Thank you so much Lucie, yes, what ever may be the language all bosses speak the same language.Lol. Prasad Hi Marc, thank you for your feedback I really appreciate you taking time to read and comment on my attempt. I will make few corrections on my attempt soon. Prasad "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is wonderfully funny. Thank you for making me laugh as I start my day. Alison |
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