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A Christmas Bear Named Rue

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Nan
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0 posted 12-25-2008 05:49 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Upon the shelves of yuletide cheer
As Christmas shoppers hustle by,
I’ve tried my best to smile this year
Yet all I seem to do is cry.

Another Christmas Day will see
The other teddy bears have gone,
All snuggled under festive trees
To greet the morning’s mirthful throng.

Now “Sunny Bear’s” with little Joy,
“Felicity’s” gone home with Grace,
And “Chipper Bear” is Johnny’s toy
Each child now dons a smiling face

Alone I sit, upon the shelf.
Last minute shoppers wander by,
Yet no one stops – not Santa’s elf.
Must be the sadness in my eye.

I’m different from the other bears
My furry body’s shades of blue
I show no twinkling, smiling fair.
I am a bear whose name is “Rue”

Just then I saw a wistful child
He stopped and tugged his mother’s knee.
I wondered why he hadn’t smiled,
His finger pointed up at me.

“Why do you want this saddened bear?
His tag says that his name is ‘Rue.’
That’s likely why he’s still up there.
He looks so tearful and he’s blue!”

The child looked up at Mom and said
“He isn’t sad, and he’s not blue.
He only seems to be.  Instead
That kindly teddy bear is true”

“He cries his “Rue-ful” tears for me.
He takes my sadness as his own.
He sets my heavy burdens free.
So I can smile as yet unknown.”

“We want that little bear called “Rue”
Please take him from his lonely stand.
He’ll bear our rues and burdens too.
A Merry Christmas is at hand!”


Oklahoma Rose
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1 posted 12-25-2008 07:38 PM       View Profile for Oklahoma Rose   Email Oklahoma Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Oklahoma Rose

Hiya Nan! I enjoyed this very much. That sad little bear sounds like me. LOL! Hope you had a wonderful Christmas, my friend.
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2 posted 12-25-2008 11:21 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

So what were ya waiting for...Christmas!!!

Excellent poem, nanners. Not only is it clever, there's a lot of wisdom in them thar words.

i should get the gold star for getting you off your rumpers to write....but i give it to you. Ya done good
Nan
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3 posted 12-26-2008 10:58 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Getting off my rumpers to give it back.. You get the credit, Deer - you earned it.. Merry Christmas & Happy New Year to you & Frannie..

Nan
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And thankya, Sue - Merry Christmas to you as well..

Justin Genius
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5 posted 12-26-2008 06:33 PM       View Profile for Justin Genius   Email Justin Genius   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justin Genius's Home Page   View IP for Justin Genius

Oh, Miss Nancy, you made me cry! And you know very well Justins DON'T cry, so lets say I had to laugh sooooooo loud tears rolled over my cheeks.

I hope your Christmas was as wonderful is mine.
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6 posted 12-26-2008 08:10 PM       View Profile for Dr.Moose1   Email Dr.Moose1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dr.Moose1

Dear Nan,
A poignant story, excellently presented, you do have a gift. Merry Christmas and the best for the new year.

Doc
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7 posted 12-29-2008 05:01 PM       View Profile for ken206573   Email ken206573   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ken206573

i reaally enjoyed your poem. i was in tears as i read it. it reminds me of my teddy bear which was "BLUE". have a wonderful holiday and a happy new year

critical mass
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8 posted 03-26-2009 08:20 PM       View Profile for critical mass   Email critical mass   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for critical mass

Hi I'm new here and I'm not sure how the workshop works, so I won't say anything.

Except that this is Excellent.
Very well thought out, with no gaps or
jerky movements. It feels natural and not forced in the rhyme.

The way to tell if a rhyming poem works is to read it outloud. This one passed the voice test.

Cheers
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