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Nan
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0 posted 2008-12-25 05:49 PM


Upon the shelves of yuletide cheer
As Christmas shoppers hustle by,
I’ve tried my best to smile this year
Yet all I seem to do is cry.

Another Christmas Day will see
The other teddy bears have gone,
All snuggled under festive trees
To greet the morning’s mirthful throng.

Now “Sunny Bear’s” with little Joy,
“Felicity’s” gone home with Grace,
And “Chipper Bear” is Johnny’s toy
Each child now dons a smiling face

Alone I sit, upon the shelf.
Last minute shoppers wander by,
Yet no one stops – not Santa’s elf.
Must be the sadness in my eye.

I’m different from the other bears
My furry body’s shades of blue
I show no twinkling, smiling fair.
I am a bear whose name is “Rue”

Just then I saw a wistful child
He stopped and tugged his mother’s knee.
I wondered why he hadn’t smiled,
His finger pointed up at me.

“Why do you want this saddened bear?
His tag says that his name is ‘Rue.’
That’s likely why he’s still up there.
He looks so tearful and he’s blue!”

The child looked up at Mom and said
“He isn’t sad, and he’s not blue.
He only seems to be.  Instead
That kindly teddy bear is true”

“He cries his “Rue-ful” tears for me.
He takes my sadness as his own.
He sets my heavy burdens free.
So I can smile as yet unknown.”

“We want that little bear called “Rue”
Please take him from his lonely stand.
He’ll bear our rues and burdens too.
A Merry Christmas is at hand!”



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Oklahoma Rose
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1 posted 2008-12-25 07:38 PM


Hiya Nan! I enjoyed this very much. That sad little bear sounds like me. LOL! Hope you had a wonderful Christmas, my friend.
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2 posted 2008-12-25 11:21 PM


So what were ya waiting for...Christmas!!!

Excellent poem, nanners. Not only is it clever, there's a lot of wisdom in them thar words.

i should get the gold star for getting you off your rumpers to write....but i give it to you. Ya done good

Nan
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3 posted 2008-12-26 10:58 AM


Getting off my rumpers to give it back.. You get the credit, Deer - you earned it.. Merry Christmas & Happy New Year to you & Frannie..


Nan
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4 posted 2008-12-26 10:58 AM


And thankya, Sue - Merry Christmas to you as well..


Justin Genius
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5 posted 2008-12-26 06:33 PM


Oh, Miss Nancy, you made me cry! And you know very well Justins DON'T cry, so lets say I had to laugh sooooooo loud tears rolled over my cheeks.

I hope your Christmas was as wonderful is mine.

Dr.Moose1
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6 posted 2008-12-26 08:10 PM


Dear Nan,
A poignant story, excellently presented, you do have a gift. Merry Christmas and the best for the new year.

Doc

ken206573
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7 posted 2008-12-29 05:01 PM


i reaally enjoyed your poem. i was in tears as i read it. it reminds me of my teddy bear which was "BLUE". have a wonderful holiday and a happy new year


critical mass
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8 posted 2009-03-26 08:20 PM


Hi I'm new here and I'm not sure how the workshop works, so I won't say anything.

Except that this is Excellent.
Very well thought out, with no gaps or
jerky movements. It feels natural and not forced in the rhyme.

The way to tell if a rhyming poem works is to read it outloud. This one passed the voice test.

Cheers

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