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0 posted 11-06-2008 10:07 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Time to get down under and dirty, folks.

We've studied various ways to write poetry using different forms of meter, amphibrachs, internal rhymes, similes, and all sorts of other things but there are two things that are not taught in the poetry books.....research and imagination.

Research is important. Even if you are writing of emotions like love, loss or joy, it is the research you conduct of your past experiences which allow you to write a worthy poem. Imagination is everything. Without it, a poem is just words on paper.

Australia!

Research it. Use your imagination. Write something clever. There are a million stories in that country. Give me one (in poetic form)

Kangaroo hop to it!
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1 posted 11-09-2008 11:21 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

May I get back to you on the last assignment?  I can't think of light and clever or humorous right now, but I can research and write.

I am missing this board, but I can't get through the last assignment yet.

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No problem, Alison. You are always worth waiting for
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3 posted 03-20-2009 06:58 AM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Mike, I noticed in CA that Chops may be coming to help here in the Workshop, a move which in my view will liven up the place and hopefully go someway towards making up for the loss of CA.

Chops I, for one, look forward to seeing your contribution here .  I know we didn't always see eye to eye in CA but hopefully we can start over.

And why did I lift this thread?

Because when you posted it Mike I started out on a long rambling antipodean something or other, and I still have my notes for it, and I thought it might be fun to try and finish it.

Is that allowed?

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ď I know we didn't always see eye to eye in CA but hopefully we can start over.Ē

Yes Beamer, we were often eyeball to eyeball and neither ever blinked. Had we done so, no one would ever remember either.

I was once quieting this job and I ask my boss how much notice did he need ? He said, twenty minutes would be just fine.

I will certainly give my friend Balladeer the same option and in twenty minutes I will be history at the Workshop..
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5 posted 03-20-2009 09:09 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Of course it's allowed, good sir. Our assignments here never die.

It would be a pleasure seeing both of you here. We have no "eyeball to eyeball" confrontations here. Actually we have none here at all. I could be the greatest bud-nipper in the world and proof is available upon demand

Welcome
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6 posted 03-20-2009 09:27 AM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Ohhh I know all about your discipline Master Mike   Whenever I pop in here I promise to be angelic.

And Chops - I'm cool with Beamer (the Germans are great mechanics), if you're ok with Stopchicks - which you have to admit has a certain je ne sais quoi, a panache or flourish!
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Thank you Balladeer,

Moonbean,  I have never done a start over, but it sounds interesting .

I wonít to turn over a new leaf and I think the bud-nipper can make it happen. I think

it would be good to see your notes on this thread . I will lurk for awhile, to be sure that all is forgiven .

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Well, then, all that is left is to get down under and dirty! Let's see some Aussie admissions!!

I also plan to step up the lessons a bit in the near future......
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9 posted 03-20-2009 10:26 AM       View Profile for chopsticks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chopsticks

I'm cool with Beamer and Iím cool with Stopchicks

Beamer, is also a great football coach at Virginia Tech .

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I'm into new leaves too Chops

Gimme a break though both of you, it's a beautiful day here and I'm going to get down and dirty with a chainsaw before I do it with a pen and a keyboard.

Later.

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11 posted 03-20-2009 01:27 PM       View Profile for chopsticks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chopsticks

I'm tired of lurking, I wrote something.


What to do with a kangaroo?
They box and are  fast on their feet.
They can throw jabs, hooks and bolos,
Without ever missing a beat.

They come from that land down under.
The land of the bright southern cross.
Where talk is a funny accent
And crocodile Dundeeís the boss.


[This message has been edited by chopsticks (03-21-2009 09:13 AM).]

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Attaboy, chopsticks. You jumped right in there (like a kangaroo?)

It's clever but the meter in some places needs work, which takes away from the cuteness of the piece. I'll capitalize the accented syllables....

WHAT to DO with a KANgaROO?
They BOX and are  FAST on their FEET.
THEY can throw JABS HOOKS and BOlos,
WithOUT ever MISSing a BEAT.

They COME from that LAND down UNder.
The LAND of the BRIGHT southern CROSS.
They TALK with a FUNny ACcent,  (Where talk is a funny accent)
And CROCodile DUNdeeís the BOSS

The good thing about the meter is that your rhyming lines are the same and excellent.

They box and are fast on their feet
Without ever missing a beat

The land of the bright Southern Cross
And Crocodile Dundee's the boss.

Dynamite lines in perfect meter!  These are the others, though..

What to do with a kangaroo
They can throw jabs, hooks and bolos

They come  from the land down under
They talk with a funny accent

Perhaps you can see that these lines do not jive together very well.  You would need to work on making their meter more similar.

"They talk with a funny accent" doesn't really work because, up to that point, every "they" you used refers to kangaroos so, unless you're saying kangaroos talk with a funny accent, it needs to be changed.

I appreciate the participation, sir
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13 posted 03-20-2009 05:48 PM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

This little ditty made me smile this evening

Mike has nailed the few problems, although I have to admit I read the "they" as meaning the kangaroos without thinking it strange at all!  I think there was something in that cup of tea I just had, lol.

Sometimes a few little bumps in the meter serve to relieve the monotony so it doesn't all have to be perfect.  But Mike will tell you all about that too.  He's pretty good at that stuff.

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Thank you Balladeer , the poem was conceived from to little research and imagination .  

Thank you Moonbeam, it had to be something in the tea.

I guess it was the equinox.

Iíll try harder next time.

It wasnít even funny.

I see that now.

Yada yada
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Most of what you write is funny Chops . It's all a question of place and time I guess.

Cheers.

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Most of what you write is funnyĒ

Thank you, Sir,

I guess that some would agree ~ That this ainít the place and I ainít got the time ~

Moonbeam, when I was eye ball to eyeball with you , I wanted to do some kicking. , but now that we

donít

have the venue of CA I would love to have a cup with you , but we donít wonít to get carried away with

this  ~ Starting over thingy ~, but I do like it.

There are few more out there that I would love to see come to ~Balladeerís house of light ~.

I wrote a poem about Balladeer's house of light, but I won't expose you guys to it without his permission.

[This message has been edited by chopsticks (03-21-2009 10:57 AM).]

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17 posted 03-21-2009 04:54 PM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

A cup! lol  A wee dram sil vous plate , or failing that a pint of bitter (do you have that over there?)

I am sure Balladeer would welcome any input in here Chops.  There seem to me to be a multitude of fascinating threads covering lots of different poetic areas, I'm quite sure that many will prompt your pen into action.

I'm struggling on with my Aussie thing, but the sun is still shining - it needs to rain!

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You can fire away with the house of light, sir....in Open, of course. Not here..
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The poem was about  Australiaís,  biggest and brightest , lighthouse  ď The cape byron  lighthouse ď that is dark for 15 seconds and  white for 1 second. It is breath taking beautiful and called ~The house of light~ by some.

I will wait and post the poem after there has been time for other poems  posted on here about  Australia.
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20 posted 03-22-2009 09:25 AM       View Profile for chopsticks   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chopsticks

ď A cup! Lol ď

Beamer, ďhave a cupĒ can mean anything from a quick cup of tea to the Boston tea party.

I donít think we have bitters here , but we are willing to try it .

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21 posted 03-22-2009 04:47 PM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Chops, if you walk into a pub here in the UK and ask for "A cup" you're most likely gonna get a strange look and a direction to the nearest lingerie store, lol.

A pint or maybe a glass is more the ticket.  And if you haven't experienced a pint of Sheepshaggers Gold or Bishop's Finger then you haven't lived.

Cheers

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Very funny Beamer.

My cup runneth over.

The next time Iím out and about Iíll ask for a Sheepshaggers Gold and Iím pretty sure I know what

directions Iíll get.
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23 posted 03-22-2009 07:12 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Ok, gentlemen. it's not a social forum, it's a workshop....
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Sorry Sir, didn't see anybody working.
 
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