Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
Attaboy, chopsticks. You jumped right in there (like a kangaroo?)
It's clever but the meter in some places needs work, which takes away from the cuteness of the piece. I'll capitalize the accented syllables....
WHAT to DO with a KANgaROO?
They BOX and are FAST on their FEET.
THEY can throw JABS HOOKS and BOlos,
WithOUT ever MISSing a BEAT.
They COME from that LAND down UNder.
The LAND of the BRIGHT southern CROSS.
They TALK with a FUNny ACcent, (Where talk is a funny accent)
And CROCodile DUNdeeís the BOSS
The good thing about the meter is that your rhyming lines are the same and excellent.
They box and are fast on their feet
Without ever missing a beat
The land of the bright Southern Cross
And Crocodile Dundee's the boss.
Dynamite lines in perfect meter! These are the others, though..
What to do with a kangaroo
They can throw jabs, hooks and bolos
They come from the land down under
They talk with a funny accent
Perhaps you can see that these lines do not jive together very well. You would need to work on making their meter more similar.
"They talk with a funny accent" doesn't really work because, up to that point, every "they" you used refers to kangaroos so, unless you're saying kangaroos talk with a funny accent, it needs to be changed.
I appreciate the participation, sir