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0 posted 2008-09-02 12:58 PM


I put a little more effort into the pivot line on these, Balladeer. Hope they meet with your approval. Will get to those ABC's as soon as I can.

wildlife triptych

moosehead
over the fireplace
how sad
the woods and river
seem tonight  


oil rig
hammers away
in the warming sea
a dead polar bear
floats silently  

the shadow
of a mechanical raptor
stalking the tundra
the spirits of
brother wolf and bear

Your links have been deleted. I told you before, politics have no place in the workshop and we know why you posted this here. Put it on Open if you feel it needs to be seen. The workshop is not going to be used to promote personal agendas.

Balladeer



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1 posted 2008-09-02 11:47 PM


That's ok, Balladeer, the tanka carry the message. The links were merely an afterthought, a visual offering freely given.

Have a wonderful evening. I'm off to work on that ABC thing.

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2 posted 2008-09-02 11:53 PM


wildlife triptych (revised)

moosehead
over the fireplace
how sad
woods and river
seem tonight  

oil rig
hammers away
in the warming sea
a dead polar bear
floats silently  

the shadow
of a mechanical raptor
stalking the tundra
spirits of brother
wolf and bear


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3 posted 2008-09-03 12:16 PM


Good stuff, Jennifer.  I have been enjoying your work that you post on the Dark Poetry board also.

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4 posted 2008-09-03 12:24 PM


Thanks, Alison, and your ABC poem is brilliant. Go to the head of the class!
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Thanks, dahlink (grins)
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