Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
Hello, Claira! It's always a pleasure to welcome a new student! We have plenty of desks available. Ok, let's begin.....
Your syllable count is not bad. You basically use a 14 syllable line, slipping to 15 a couple of times. The iambic is not bad for a first try, either. If you look at the bold type you will see where you either put two stressed or two unstressed syllables together. Iambic, of course, is based on unstressed-stressed flow (da-DUM). If you work on those areas, it will help greatly.
Using commas to separate sentences doesn't work, as you have done in lines 3,5,6 and seven and, aside from misspelling fair, which should be fare, you have done quite well!
the TEACH-er set CLASS a TASK, which PUT me IN a PAN-ic.
it's PROB-a -BLY EAS-i-ER to RE-build the ti-TAN-ic
i TAKE my PEN and GRAB-bing BOOK, i SNEAK back IN-to SCHOOL
as SPIT wads GATH-er a-ROUND me, cre-A-ting a GREAT POOL.
the OTH-er STU-dents FAIR quite WELL. i KNOW that I'M the ROOK-ie
i'm SLIP-ping OUT with AL-li-SON, GO and PLAY some HOOK-y
TEACH-er, PLEASE be GENT-le NOW, you REAL-ly ARE a TON-ic
so IS this PO-em NEAR-ly THERE, MET-ered and i-AM-bic
I will rewrite it in iambic and perhaps you will see the difference and pick up a few pointers to help you with your next one. Also, references in this thread you may want to check out will also help. Welcome to the class, my new friend. All you need here is the desire to learn and you have shown that so my time is yours
The teacher gave the class a task, which put me in a panic.
I think it would be easier rebuilding the Titanic.
I take my pen and, grabbing book, I sneak back into school
As spitwads gather 'round me to create a massive pool.
The other students fare quite well. I know that I'm the rookie.
I'm slipping out with Alison to go and play some hooky.
Dear teacher, please be gentle now. You really are a tonic.
So is this poem nearly there, both metered and iambic?
Hope this helps