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0 posted 2005-09-15 07:54 PM




If writing worthwhile poetry is something that you choose
There are some greattechniques around that all great poets use.
Let's take a little look at how the masters set the tone
And maybe we can get some hints to help us with our own.

Enjambment is a way to break the boredom of the text
By running one line into the beginning of the next.
The reader is encouraged to continue on because
The poem makes more sense when one continues without pause.

I have to say I love the way
The sky looks in the month of May

I think that I shall never see
A poem as lovely as a tree.



A caesura is a pause placed in the middle of a line.
Combined with an enjambment, the results can be divine.
The poet takes control of where the reader stops to rest
And it can help the power of the words to do their best.

Ah, balmy breath, that dost almost persuade
Justice to break her sword!One more, one more.
Be thus when thou art dead, and I will kill thee,
And love thee after.
.................Othello


When words rhyme single syllables, it's labeled Masculine
horse - course
When words rhyme double syllables, it's labeled Feminine
crossing - embossing
Triple rhymes are tough but they can give your poem panache.
Lord Byron was a master and now we have Ogden Nash!

A wonderful bird is the pelican,
His bill will hold more than his belican.
He can take in his beak
Food enough for a week,
But I’m damned if I see how the helican.



Alliteration is a way to have a little fun.
The same sound starts most of the words until the line is done.
It gives a rapid-fire effect that makes it very strong
And rappers like to use this form when they create a song.

Suzie sells seashells by the seashore.

Peter picked a peck of pickled peppers.



Onomatopoeia - now here's a clever way
To make your words create the sounds you're trying to display.

The murmer of innumeral bees...........Tennyson

Say it slow and you can hear the humming of the bees.
Lines like this add audio to words the reader sees.


A zeugma? Not an animal that one finds in the zoo.
It's just a verb with more than just one meaning - it has two!
It uses different objects to describe two different things
And, when you use it craftily, it makes your poem sing!

"Whenever I shop at the Bijou, I get a bottle of perfume and a headache."
"I'm not getting nasty; I'm getting chapped lips."



Chiasmus uses two words twice together in a line
A-B-B-A is how to use correctly this design.
It adds a touch of music to the way the lines are read
And repetition helps to keep the words there in one's head.

Whenever I stop to shop, I generally shop until I stop.

Not that fair field
Of Enna, where Proserpin gathering flowers
Herself a fairer flower by gloomy Dis
Was gathered.
...........................Milton's Paradise Lost


The apostrophe - I don't mean the mark of punctuation
In poetic terms this word provides a different connotation.
It's talking to the dead or something that cannot talk back
A quality I'll verify my ex- wife didn't lack!!

Good Lord in Heaven!

Death, be not proud...
............. - John Donne


Synecdocheis when part is used to represent the whole.
"Give me a hand" does not mean that just your hand is my goal.
It's just a way of saying things to make your meaning clear
When you stand up before a crowd and say, "Lend me an ear."

Tell that its sculptor well those passions read

Which yet survive, stamped on these lifeless things,

The hand that mocked them.
................Ozymandius (Shelley)


The simile compares two things by using "like" or "as"
One of the greatest weapons that a clever poet has.
It helps describe an object in a multitude of ways
And, like the metaphor, it adds pure brilliance to a phrase.

The Assyrian came down like a wolf on the fold
And his cohorts were gleaming in purple and gold.
..... - Lord Byron


The metaphor Now here's the thing that makes it all worthwhile,
Producing worthwhile imagery to make one cry or smile.
It is the heart of everything a poet can produce
And it denotes the talent of the poet by its use.

We have four kinds of metaphors that we can always use.
You need to pick the one that suits you better when you choose.
The first kind names the subject and the object in the line
Julie was a gem is one of these that works out fine.

The next kind names the subject but the object is implied.
The way you use description in a smart way is your guide.
Mary's chirping away compares poorMary to a bird
And one can see that vision though you never used the word!

The third kind names the object but the subject isn't here.
Description of the object makes the subject now appear.
It falls in teardrops from the sky would make a nice refrain
And, though it isn't named, the reader knows the subject's rain.

The last kind is a tough one...only masters use it well.
No subject used - no object used there, either. What the hell!?!?
We use a double metaphor to make both meanings clear
And, if we do it wisely, our true meaning will appear.

Here it comes chugging into its sty

Into its sty? Must be a pig the author writes about.
And chugging? Like a slow train it moves toward the sty, no doubt.
So there you have the pig and train, though neither word was used.
If you don't use it well, you'll find the reader is confused.

It sifts from leaden sieves.............Emily Dickenson

So there you have some ways that many poets ply their trade.
For every great work written there were prices to be paid.
For those who want to be the very best that they can be
It's good to know the basics in this world of poetry.


© Copyright 2005 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2005-09-17 07:16 PM


...



You forgot...

free verse


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2 posted 2005-09-17 08:01 PM


ROTFL - Deer doesn't do free verse much... Besides - There aren't any rules...
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3 posted 2005-10-21 02:01 PM



This is wonderful!  I've never enjoyed getting my lessons so much.

smiles,
constance

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4 posted 2005-10-21 03:48 PM


'deer,
Yeah. You can't teach what you don't know!

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5 posted 2005-10-21 07:02 PM


Larry, if more people realized that, the world would be a much better place!
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6 posted 2005-10-21 07:08 PM


You crack me UP!
And you already know that I believe this is an incredible write.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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7 posted 2005-11-27 12:05 PM


Good grief! It read to me that there was someone with a sty in their eye, and they were late to catch their train, see?     Okay with this you made it into the special "I will learn the rules one day" folder.
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8 posted 2005-11-27 11:41 AM


I came across this just today ...
My 'Deer - you take my breath away!
These lessons taught were deftly penned ...
Your skill and talent have no end!!!

     

What an absolutely WONDERFUL write Michael.
You've gotta know that I enjoyed this tremendously!
It's a for sure!!!


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9 posted 2005-11-27 08:17 PM


Thank you, ladies

Kit. I thought this an excellent companion to your "feet". Glad you like it!

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10 posted 2005-12-13 03:39 PM


Hey 'Deer,

It's good of you to introduce terminology like this to our members in such an easy-to-swallow format (to use a kind of metaphor, I guess?).

I'd only suggest you go back and make sure you gave credit to everyone you cited.

Brian

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11 posted 2005-12-13 11:20 PM


Hello, Brian...

Well, it would take a moderator to so it since I have gone past the time allowed to edit. I don't feel it is necessary, legally, as one is, I believe, permitted to reproduce lines of a piece of work without committing copyright infringement. It would be right, though, as a courtesy and a moderator may insert these as he wishes..

I think that I shall never see......Joyce Kilmer

Peter Piper picked........Mother Goose

I'm not getting nasty; I'm getting chapped lips - Neil Simon

The rest I can find no evidence of authorship. "Susie sells sea shells" is regarded to only as a tongue twister created for exercise.

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12 posted 2005-12-13 11:51 PM


I just thought it was nice that you'd been giving credit to your sources for the most part.  I like to think that people are going to track down and read more from these poets since you've given them such a spotlight.

It doesn't really have a lot to do with copyright infringement, I don't think.  I was just so pleased with your willingness to use real examples that I wished you'd been more thorough in documenting them.  Having done so, I don't really think there's any need to edit the original post.

Let me stress that I wasn't implying you'd broken any rules.  I had intended it as a positive suggestion...

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13 posted 2005-12-14 12:23 PM


Yes, I took it as positive, Brian, and you are absolutely correct that it would be the courteous thing to do. I was accessing quite a few web pages and, if the poets were not listed, I didn't take the time to look for them.

Now that I have looked for them, with the exception of the three I listed, I STILL can't find them!  

No worries. I would never take your comments  the wrong way...I appreciate your input.

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14 posted 2006-03-30 12:29 PM


'Deer dearest man, I came across this today, mmmmm, does that read right? I was browsing as is my wont and discovered this utter beauty, YOU know I applaud you, the brilliant way its crafted, the  content and the form are without doubt truly exquisite.

Did you get the feeling I like it a lot? Mmmmmm oh I do darling man I do. Beautifully done

Love and warm mushy stuff
as always
Mushy
x x x x

Some write light
In such a way
That the air sings

Others write right
In such a way
That the words
Reverberate

You write
And the whole
Is a song
Words, and music
Complete

Marsha
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Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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15 posted 2006-03-30 12:55 PM


'Deer darling man, whoops, I forgot to add this to my library.
You know if I had a brain, or even half a one, I'd be dangerous. Never mind, I've got it now, thank you muchly
Love and warm mushy stuff
as always
Mushy
x x x x

Forgive me pretty please

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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16 posted 2006-04-22 10:03 PM


Thanks for the lesson, Balladeer.  I had always wondered if there were different classifications of metaphors.  Now I know!  Thanks for the edgicashun!  (Phonetics are a curiosity, for sure.)  Your poetic lesson was very much enjoyed!

misc'e

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17 posted 2006-06-05 03:16 AM


A brilliant metric on verse technique
Enough to make Nash jealous it's so unique.
I never knew there was a gendered rhyme
Even though I wrote them all the time.
All the examples were quite specific,
Gracefully done and not pontific!
So what can I say, it's not often done
To convey technique with so much fun.

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18 posted 2006-06-06 12:31 PM


Thank you, Troy, for enjoying my work and providing such a robust reply. I welcome you to Passions
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19 posted 2009-07-21 03:14 PM


Is this the very first lesson from the great Sir Balladeer? I would like to start back at the beginning if that is acceptable.

Arana Darkwolf

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20 posted 2009-07-21 06:38 PM


Actually this wasn't a lesson, Rachel, but just something I created as a guide to some of the poetic terms and techniques used in writing poetry. It's a good place to start...


For help with meter, check out this entry by my poetic twin, Kit McCallum. It could help you a lot..
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21 posted 2009-07-21 06:58 PM


Thank you, Sir. I have added that one to my library. It is already making more sense to me.

Arana Darkwolf

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22 posted 2011-04-06 12:50 PM


Guess I need to do this one!


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23 posted 2011-04-06 11:50 AM


  Thank you!  There are a couple I have not heard of before--always something to spice things up.  
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24 posted 2011-04-07 07:50 AM


Alison & Klassy et al,
Although Balladeer didn't post this as an exercise/ assignment, that's easily corrected. How about pick any three, work them into a piece, and, we should be able to tell which three you were using without having to be told ?

Doc

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Okay, I'll give it a shot soon.  I think there's a few lessons that I never did and I am going to try to get them all in.

Thanks, Doc.  



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26 posted 2016-02-25 10:56 PM


What an incredible post!  Love it!!
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27 posted 2016-02-26 05:26 PM


Thank you,,,glad  you enjoyed!
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