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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Enchantment lay in swirling mist, the play of light on water, kissed by "Sister Sun" in dawning sky, the elements which form this tryst. Between the "Nature" and the "Why" of things portrayed by such as I who fumble blindly for the words on days when all can do is try. Elusive as the "Jub-Jub Bird" in "Carrolls'" poem to the absurd, this curtain which obscures my view prevents that which is much preferred. That I, who strives to share with you, might yet let some small glimpse come through from where the words in subtle hues emergent, gleam their meanings true. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I have been waiting for this, for I knew it would be exquisitely written, and it was just as I imagined. Robert Frost would be proud of this flawless piece, perfect iin rhyme and meter. Thank you for the enjoyment you have given in presenting another masterful poem. Poetic hugs Liz |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Elizabeth, Aw, Shucks...( that is to say, Thank you, Dear lady). Doc |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Well done, indeed Doc. |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
And thank you for sharing! Though I note no stumbling.. These words are beautifully written. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Pete, Thanks, it's an interesting form. Doc Endlessecho, Thank you!( but that's only because you didn't see all the rewrites.) Doc |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You make it look so easy, Doc! Very good! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm smiling here. We don't show all the rewrites so that our end product appears to have been easy to write - That's a skill you definitely have, Doc...  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Denise, Thank you again dear, I've enjoyed this assignment and look forward to next months. Doc Nan, Thanks, I don't know about skill, maybe it's more about having the time to work these in while I'm working. As I've said before, my day job allows me construct these while I'm still running production. As long as neither one suffers too badly, I don't see the harm. Doc |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
what i enjoyed the most is that you combined here "old-fashioned" musings over nature with everyday talk and speech. I found the latter where the hardest to incorporate, probably because they were not part of Frost's then vocabulary... so yes, a masterful poem. |
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