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Not A Poet
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0 posted 2003-06-25 01:20 PM


If only I could write a proper sonnet,
With meter flowing smooth and unforced rhyme,
To stake my poet's reputation on it
Would be a joy to treasure anytime.
Or even write some verse of lighter note,
A limerick or two to bring a smile
To those who read the poem that I wrote...
For sure I have been trying quite a while.
To maximize the benefit of rays
And best enjoy the feel of warming light
That fills the air on brightest summer days,
Instead of working now I think I might
Forget the effort and, with drinks in hand,
Go join my nekkid buddies in the sand.

© Copyright 2003 Pete Rawlings - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-06-25 01:57 PM


Hey!!!    Don't forget me!!!!

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (06-25-2003 01:57 PM).]

Munda
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2 posted 2003-07-23 10:08 AM


KEWL Pete!But uhh... I hardly dare say... I keep stumbling over one line:"To those who read the poem that I wrote..." For the Dutch that are only nine syllables. See what happens when you play nekkid with your buddies in the sand!
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3 posted 2003-07-23 04:25 PM


Pete~
*giggling* ... shake that sand outta yer booty~

This is just gosh darned WONDERFUL !!!!!

Moi ?  ... no way I'm writing another Sonnet, fully dressed ... much less nekkid !
I'm just gonna keep reading you !!!

Happy SUMMER DAYS !!!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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4 posted 2003-07-23 04:35 PM



LOL...this is cute, Pete.  Made me smile today.
I love it.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

Titia Geertman
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5 posted 2003-07-23 07:15 PM



LOL I stumbled over the same line Munda did, but all the same, I like it and as I've finished my homework I'll join you in the sandbox.

I have to push Marge in the merry-go-round anyway.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Not A Poet
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6 posted 2003-07-24 12:29 PM


Ah, my dear Dutch friends, I think I know what is throwing you off here. It must be the word poem. If you will check www.webster.com  and search for poem under dictionary, they give 2 pronunciations for the word. The first is clearly two syllables while the second is really only one. I assume this is like all dictionary references wherein the first listed is the preferred or most common. In any case, having spent most of my life in Oklahoma and near the southern part of the USA, I can't even conceive poem as one syllable. Please try to bear with me on this   I can't claim it is right but I just can't read it any other way.



Pete

Never express yourself more clearly than you can think - Niels Bohr


Dang, I can't type either

[This message has been edited by Not A Poet (07-24-2003 12:31 AM).]

Munda
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7 posted 2003-07-24 11:32 AM


Geesh, thanks Pete! Would you believe I have pronounced poem as a 1 syllable word for over 20 years? Hmm, I wonder why nobody ever told me, but I'm glad you did. I love to learn something new, so if you ever come across something weird I wrote, please feel free to correct me. Thanks again Pete and umm... I suppose your sonnet has perfect iambic pentameter uh?
angelblueyes
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8 posted 2003-07-25 03:25 PM


From one Okie to another this was great.I enjoyed it.
angelblueyes

Titia Geertman
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9 posted 2003-07-25 03:33 PM



LOL then it's po-em????? OK you got an A+ but it still sounds unfamiliar to me, so I suggest: you write po-ems and me and Munda write poems ok?

Titia

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Sunshine
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10 posted 2003-07-25 03:41 PM


Yep.

Po-ets write po-ems!


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11 posted 2003-07-27 08:39 AM




I've requested a "sandbox" for us folks

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12 posted 2003-07-27 08:44 PM



Tee-Hee-Hee !!!
See even TEACH got nekkid !


Well, either that or she's just showing her 'butt'~

YEAH ... Teach got us a SandBox !
~*Marge*~

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13 posted 2003-07-28 10:30 AM


And a cute little butt it is too.

Thanks for the idea Marge

And thank you to all who seemed to enjoy this fun little tidbit.

Pete

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14 posted 2003-08-04 07:21 PM


Pete,
Thanks to you for this little gem. ( and if if got Nan to show off a little, so much the better!).
Doc

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