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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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 The daylight breaks anew in soft accord In streaming light across the shadowed dawn A gift that gently feathers, from my Lord It touches gracefully and then is gone. Though shrouded, darkest shadows filter in And rock me clear to my eternal core They push me down, repeatedly, in sin I flounder helplessly forevermore. My weary eyes behold a dawning light I grovel, but I cannot reach from here Please tell me, Lord, do I have any right To beg for mercy sweet with You so near? So powerful is your beseeching call My Lord, my God, you surely are my all. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
It's not faaaaaaaaaaaiiiiiiir!!!!!!! How come Marge gets to spend all her time in the playground and still come up with a perfect sonnet??!!??!!  Enjoyed this muchly, Marge....hehehe glad you got it handed in in time for grading, cos its gonna keep your average well on top!!!*Slinks off with own poor offering to the detention for extra improvement room* Laterz, Liz xxx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Aha! And I thought you said you couldn't do it. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You did this by yourself, or with the help of Tylenol? It sounds so LIKE you to come across with a beauty.... now I've REALLY got to get to work! [wonder if I can find one that some long dead artist did as "anonymous...."....nah....I wouldn't do that....  ] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sonnet is not a 'natural' format for me, as I have a tendency to da-DUM to a different-metered drummer~ However, I attempted it ... and with Denise's TREMENDOUS help was able to complete the assignment. STRESS ???? Yeppers, I told ya' I was 'sick'  ... but ya' wouldn't listen ... sooooooooo Doc says I now have a valid excuse (notice I didn't say REASON) to revert to my childish antics and RETURN TO THE PLAYGROUND !! Wahooooooooooooooo !Swings n' things and merry-go-rounds Out on the playing field I can be found~ Singing and swinging twirling 'round with delight DA-duming to my own beat Sifting sand in the box playing with the building blocks~ Having just a little fun cause now I don't hafta count my DA-DUM !  Thanks everyone ... ESPECIALLY YOU, Denise~ *Huglets* from the playground~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Marge, Not a bad "dum" in this one ( I knew ya could do it all along). See ya by the "go- round". Doc |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DOC~ YOU just made my day !!!  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Ya know - I read this when you first posted it - and I smiled... Then I smiled again... because it's perfect, of course... Note - Personal stuff is causing serious delays in my workshop attendance this month... Don't tell, or everyone will be out the door... And while I'm otherwise occupied - Lookie what Margie does... (She said it couldn't be done - She said she couldn't/wouldn't do it - BUT - Margie did a sonnet write!!!).. Please be advised that I'll be framing this and putting it up on the bulletin board to encourage those who think playing on the swings is more fun than writing in the workshop...  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhNanners~ Much as I love ya' ... I wouldn't do this again for all the sand in the sandbox! Me thinkum' swingum' is more funner~ BUT ... me also likum' teacher who is pleased ! Honest Injun ! Thankee muchly~ *Huglets* in sand~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Well, I'm late getting to this one, but you know I love it. Just as the teacher said..it's perfect.  Hugs, ~Me [This message has been edited by vlraynes (06-18-2003 02:56 AM).] |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
You da dummed here perfectly sweet Marge. Did you miss me in the sand box? I'll be back, soon I hope, when things settle down here a bit with this sheepbusiness. Darn, I don't have lambs myself, but all the more work on those of others LOL Very nice work sweetie Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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