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garysgirl
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0 posted 2003-04-06 11:01 AM


Beauty

Beauty is found
Everywhere
Around
Us, if we look
Today, tomorrow, or
Yesterday
.
.
.
.
Beauty is a joB
E
veryone needs to improvE
A
ll people, everyone, needs to make A
U
nified effort, me and yoU
T
o accomplish this. But it's noT
Y
our looks I'm speaking of, but beauty in unitY

© Copyright 2003 Ethel GG Kent - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-04-06 11:05 AM



Why, I think they're just right!

        Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2003-04-06 01:44 PM


Ethel~
Now is this fun ... or what ?

Not nearly as pretty as the rictameter ... but, they'll do for now~

Meet me on the playground !
We got new sand in the sandbox ... buckets of fun !
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Dr.Moose1
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3 posted 2003-04-06 06:31 PM


garysgirl,
I'd have to agree with Marge,they work just fine as they are. You may want to try adding a meter to another one to see if that's what you sense is missing.
Doc

aries_luv_ppl
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4 posted 2003-04-08 02:22 PM


I love these lines:

Beauty is a joB
Everyone needs to improvE
All people, everyone, needs to make A
Unified effort, me and yoU
To accomplish this. But it's noT
Your looks I'm speaking of, but beauty in unitY

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 2003-04-09 10:55 AM


I think they are great...

regards
sudhir

Titia Geertman
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6 posted 2003-04-10 08:33 PM



Me thinks they're great too

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

IcyFlamez89
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7 posted 2003-04-10 10:09 PM


Wow, it's much better than myn...[[hmph!]] lollz. its a BEAUTY!
Bridget Shenachie
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8 posted 2003-04-17 07:06 PM


I didn't see anything missing in this.  These are just very well-written acrostics.
Enjoyed.  I can't hate it because it's BEAUTIFUL!

Shenachie

Nan
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9 posted 2003-05-01 08:49 AM


...A double dose of BEAUTY is a good thing...
This one feels just right to me, Ethel

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10 posted 2003-05-01 10:55 AM



Ethel,

I am impressed. Two in one....

I enjoyed the thoughts especially in the second one.

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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