Cheerful (My Attemt at a Rictameter.)

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Cheerful (My Attemt at a Rictameter.)

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

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0 posted 2003-03-15 10:44 PM

Cheerful
~ By Sue ~

Cheerful
Happy, laughter
Jumping with so much joy
Contented with life the way it is
Living with so much more delight
Encouraging such happy thoughts
Joyously singing
Smiling, grinning
Cheerful

3-15-03

Sunshine

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1 posted 2003-03-16 07:30 AM

Sue, I enjoyed this and heaven knows you gave us a wonderfully upbeat poem!  Good for you.  Let's count syllables, shall we?

Cheerful  [2]
Happy, laughter  [4]
Jumping with so much joy  [6] [doing good!]
Contented with life the way it is [9]
Living with so much more delight  [8]
Encouraging such happy thoughts  [8]
Joyously singing [5]
Smiling, grinning [4]
Cheerful [2]

Here's a suggestion on a slight alteration that will get you back into the numeric count of this poem:

Cheerful
Happy, laughter
Jumping with so much joy
Contented with life as it is [or]Content with life the way it is [your version, dropping the "ed" after Content]
I am living much more delightfully
Encouraging such happy thoughts [or another variation: Encouragement in happy thoughts]
In joyously singing,[or: as joyously singing]
Smiling, grinning
Cheerful

Now I leave with a Sunday smile on my face...this poem really makes one feel good, Sue!  Thank you!

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (03-16-2003 09:25 AM).]

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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2 posted 2003-03-16 06:10 PM

Good show, SuzieQ~

Good syllable-count, Shine !

Sue ... it works really well with the adjustments~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Nan

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3 posted 2003-03-23 05:05 PM

Cheerful
Morn met with smiles
Reflections cast aglow
Let grief not callous tenderness
Heavenly mirth emanates from within.
A heart content remands eclipse
Delights in rising sun
Rendering hearts
Cheerful

Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

4 posted 2003-03-25 12:15 PM

Such good advice in this poem--for enjoying the moment and appreciating what we have and who we are. Yep--happy is best!

Shenachie

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