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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada 
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(this is still unpolished; will welcome comments.) He glides his skates swishing in a flurry of ice, caressing with slow movements; mere foreplay. Silence compels the crowd disguises excitement Great expectations fill the air. All watch. He stops at center ring. Ice gladiator all set to make a kill gently, with grace. Grandly. Then flips. Perfect landing! He hears the crowd’s applause~ incense daring him show his skills. Dazzling. Teasing with his body ~ a hypnotic magnet becoming a blur of colors. Blending. Music goes mad as he circles with dizzy speed~ a human whirling, spinning top. Gidddy. Floating as in a dream one cannot get out of. Now he’s a leaf falling in slow motion. Still more he builds into a climactic finish~ a tornado that goes in a frenzy. He drops, slips on his foot; loses balance and dives his nose flat on the cold ice. All are stunned. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Nice, nice, nice, nice, nice, nice, nice, nice, nice! Wow, you really raised the bar with this one. We'll all have out work cut out for us now! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I guess you did pretty well, jjote... Ratleader is the best judge of cinquain, and has given his stamp of approval... Sounds good to me as well... I liked the way you expanded the format into a full length cinquainish poem... Too bad the guy went "splat"...  ...  .. |
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