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MissGypsiNess Junior Member
since 2001-07-02
Posts 21MyWay - The HighWay |
Yon whistling wind of summer’s day A gypsy hearkened distant beck Familiar chant resounds indeed To call’s travail she must pay heed With visions of her yearly trek MissGypsiNess was on her way On board from Boston whisked away Train to Chicago by next day And so began her westbound trek With wanderlust her summer’s beck All in her track pay rightly heed Beware of impish gypsy deed From Chi-town northerly her deed Kazoo and on to Colon’s way Where wizardry made magic heed Her mission to GearUp each day Till chipmunks chattered farewell beck Embarked then on her westward trek Two nights on rail she kept on trek To follow wanderlust her deed Crossed Rockies to Pacific beck Then headed on northwestern way Debarking for a fortnight’s day A caution all Canucks should heed In concert led by Lauper’s heed To “Girls just having fun” last trek As Cher sang songs of yesterday “I’ve Got You, Babe” her grandest deed The timeless queen of Gypsy’s way “I’m done, so follow THIS!” her beck Responding to MissGypsi’s beck Mysteria showed her the way Cross mountainside she must take heed Vancouver’s hills and dales to trek A truly staunch and sprightly deed More’s yet to come than told this day Adventure as her beck, the calling to her trek She’ll pay eternal heed to meet her quest indeed To forge her gypsy way through ever and a day |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Sounds like a wonderful trip. Nicely written, rhymes and everything. Maybe a small bit of fudging on indeed/deed, day/yesterday? But I think you should be allowed that anyway. Wish I had been there. Pete |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Nice imagery! Suggestion: Try the same poem in free verse just to see how it comes out! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hi Radrook - Thanks for reading and suggesting improvements. Believe me - It's not easy for a gypsy to write of her travels in such a restricted format. Good thing it's 'free verse' month, eh? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yo Pete - I did those little 'cheats' to keep from being bored... ya know?..  |
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