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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Were hands of time to sweep this chance away, as desert sands which shift before the wind, would silence then engulf these words we'd say? So, aimlessly, these thoughts begin to drift. The course of such events, one cannot know, relentless are those hands , however slow. The shift, to one of purpose, happens slow, and often seems more like to drift away. What mysteries await us, who can know, each subject to the vagueries of wind? On these un-certain paths commence to drift, in search of something meaningful to say. And where might we now find such words to say? The kind to lend momentum, though still slow? The essence of some pattern in their drift, shall we stand mute to watch it slip away, or strive to voice the message in the wind? (It leaves us little choice is all I know) The constant shift I feel is all I know. "It adds to our confusion" one might say. If answers there await us in the wind, perhaps we're well advised to take it slow. Bid this one more illusion fade away, confusion sets the course that I now drift. Yet, there is wonder too, in thoughts which drift, as we seek to expand that which we know, we sift through them and slowly peel away the layers 'til we find the words to say. Intrigued, as from a pace which started slow, are answers now un-covered by the wind. O'er time all things receed before the wind, and deeper yet do pile the sands which drift. All movement is as best described as slow, 'neath burden of those things that we would know. That we in turn might think of what to say, might these few words help lift that weight away. In wind that I allude to, (this I know) to drift back to the current, (let us say ) "Go Slow, or risk that you'll be blown away!" |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hey, very nice work Doc. Good meter, well developed theme, nice wording. I like it. But please admit that you worked on this a while, that you didn't actually start yesterday. Thanks, Pete |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Wow, Doc! This is passing fine for a sestina. I think that you just moved to the head of the class! Shenachie |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Pete, Thanks. Actually, by my standards, I did work on this awhile. The first two stanzas went practically without effort. From there on each succeeding stanza took more and more re-writes. Sorry Pete, started 7:05 A.M. 7/29 finished 2:15 P.M. 7/29. Doc Bridget, Thank you. Without a doubt, these are difficult forms for me. I don't know about the head of the class, I'm glad to have been able to finish one though. Doc |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Doc, I asked you not to tell me that. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DrMoose~ A most rewarding read ... 'If answers there await us in the wind, perhaps we're well advised to take it slow.' YES !!! I'm slowing down RIGHT NOW~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Excellent work on this difficult form. To have it make sense is the trick. Outstanding! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Pete, Well, I did apologige first. Doc Dear Marge. Thank you my friend. If only the Doctor could take his own advice. Doc R.s. Thanks. Nan descibed these very well as poetic puzzles. On completion, they bring a certain sense of accomplishment.thanks again. Doc |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is pretty darned good, Doc - but then there hasn't been any form that you haven't mastered in grand style. The sestina is one of the most difficult formats to do properly, and you make it look easy - Glad you're here, m'friend..  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Nan, Well, I suppose they'll all start calling me " apple polisher", (or worse) but, I'm glad I'm here too. Without the guidance and inspiration I've recieved from others here, most of what I've written lately wouldn't have been written at all. I am indebted to you all for that. Doc |
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