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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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Trochaic Tetrameter? Cleaned my room here out today, did a job quite well I'd say Now I'm tired looking 'round, all things out of place I've found Need a drink, a large one too, writing down this verse for you Month of June quite near it's end, still no class have I attend Iambic Dimeter? Dimeter tried No thing in mind Insane I was I must be blind Anapestic Trimeter? Yes, it took for me all day and night I will not give it up, it's not bright The trimeter is tough and I sigh Say "I like it" would be a darn lie Dactylic Trimeter? Back to the meter that I like the best Resting my case here when you do the rest Not in the corner for flunking Nan's class Back to my room where I'll make some more mess ________________ Well, I tried and you tell me what it is I've created LOL A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Well Titia, I am having trouble with this, too. So, I guess that makes 2 of us. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Yea Smartchic, this is a tough one LOL I tapped a hole in me floor  Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ Someone here has been 'sandbagging' us ! You little poetic Dutchie wizard~ I think I just don't want to work that hard~  Good show sweetie~ (or I guess it's good ... heck, what do I know ?) WELL ... it LOOKS impressive !!! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Titia , Well, I am having a lot of trouble with this too. I think that what is happening is that when we write poetry, we tend to stress syllables that are not normally stressed. Our Iambs get all out of whack, and then people have a tough time following the ryhthm. You've done a good job, it just needs a little work. Doc |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, Titia, you certainly put out a good effort and manage to keep your humor intact while doing it!!! Few people can write with your charm...  |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Thanks guys, too many things on me mind to take the time needed. Deer, sweet man, could you show me your da-dums on some of these lines? or are they all messed up here. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Oh boy, you tried 4 different meters and I didn't even start! Way to go Titia! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"The trimeter is tough and I sigh Say "I like it" would be a darn lie" LOL ... loved these Titia! You've got me smiling over here! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
LOL I got you all smiling , but is there anybody who can tell this dumm Dutchie if it makes any sense???  TEACH!!!!!!!!!!? I got a whole bunch of apples here!! Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Darn! I've always been a sucker for apples!  OK, Titia, let's go....Trochaic Tetrameter ------------------- It's not. It's heptameter (7 feet, 14 syllables). Eliminate that by breaking the lines in two after the seventh syllable. As far as the trochaic: "Now I'm tired looking 'round"...the bold syllables are accented....kills the trochaic. The rest is fine, except for the fact that "have attend" is improper English. Iambic Dimeter --------------- Bad luck here, Titia. It would be fine except that dimeter has the accent on the first syllable (something many Americans don't know, either). The rest is fine. Anapestic Trimeter ------------------ Excellent! The word trimeter shot you down for the same reason as dimeter...the accent is on the first syllable. Dactylic Trimeter ------------------ Well, we will have to call it three feet with a toe, since you have 10 syllables, which include 4 accented ones. The dactylic and the anapestic feet are comprised of three syllables per foot. All in all, I think you did very well. You took on the challenge of trying to write in all four styles and I think it was an excellent effort. I applaud your desire to learn and your eagerness to try to learn....hat's off to you, Dutchie  |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Thanks Deer, but keep your hat on till I got some of these right LOL I'll study them again, and again, and again sigh Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Wow, Titia. I'm impressed with your efforts here. I'm in the back row watching the smart students get it down. I am inspired! Thanks for showing me how it's done. Shenachie |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
... Thanks Mike... Titia, you really have worked on this one - I'm so grateful for Mike's help, as I needed his input this month..  |
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