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Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

0 posted 2002-04-16 08:08 PM

I can't describe this inner feeling
When I am out there in the night
It's like a room without a ceiling

The whole sky is so appealing
When the stars are shining bright
I can't describe this inner feeling

For the soul, it sure is healing
Shined upon by soft moon's light
It's like a room without a ceiling

You can see me swiftly reeling
With my arms held open wide
I can't describe this inner feeling

And almost daily I am dealing
With this awsome pretty sight
It's like a room without a ceiling

Maybe I should just be kneeling
Grab the earth and hold her tight
I can't describe this inner feeling
It's like a room without a ceiling

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2002-04-16 10:07 PM

Titia~
This is well-developed and simply gorgeous~
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Not A Poet
Member Elite

since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

2 posted 2002-04-17 09:36 AM

Titia, this is excellent. The theme stands out exceptionally well and the rhymes are very nice. I really enjoyed it.

One little nit-picker though. I wonder if, in the third stanza, you meant shined instead of shine, starting the second line. Or did I just misunderstand the context?

Thanks,
Pete

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

3 posted 2002-04-18 08:46 PM

Marge, thanks sweet girl,

for you.

Not a Poet, you're right, needed a 'd' at the end, sorry about that. Thank you for liking it.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2002-05-02 08:10 PM

This is truly wonderful, Titia - You make me want to go out and play in the moonlight... What a feeling!!..

Muys
Member

since 2002-04-06

Posts 389
The Netherlands

5 posted 2002-05-15 06:55 AM

Dearest Daughter
I know what you feel

And almost daily I am dealing
With this awesome pretty sight
It like a room without ceiling
O I am so lucky in this night.

Ilove you
Your Mother

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2002-05-15 11:04 PM

And may your vision of this wondorous sight always shine like this wonderful poem did Titia. Oh you write beautifully when you are so happy

Lovely indeed.

~ Carpe' Diem ~

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

7 posted 2002-05-16 06:02 AM

Titia,
I'm seeing stars.
Doc

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