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Outside My Window - Pantoum

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

0 posted 2002-03-17 12:04 PM

I always like to meet two challenges at once, Titia...

OUTSIDE MY WINDOW

Outside my window time and tide roll on,
Caressing breeze of halcyon lagoon;
Yet trice of sail and morrow's tides begone.
Best sally fore ebbed waters flow eftsoon.

Caressing breeze of halcyon lagoon,
Inviting days of lollygagging pace;
Best sally fore ebbed waters flow eftsoon,
Laps offing seaward steadily apace.

Inviting days of lollygagging pace,
The drift of tide defines each sandy grain.
Laps offing seaward steadily apace,
As mere imprints of yesterday remain.

The drift of tide defines each sandy grain.
Let waves not flow slap-dash upon this shore,
As mere imprints of yesterday remain;
Today's a present gone forevermore.

Let waves not flow slap-dash upon this shore;
Each flush of dusk yields blush of dawn sublime.
Today's a present gone forevermore;
Here Trumpet's call to live life's full betime.

Each flush of dusk yields blush of dawn sublime;
Yet trice of sail and morrow's tides begone.
Here Trumpet's call to live life's full betime,
Outside my window time and tide roll on.

A Simile is as easy as pie, but a Metaphor is a piece of cake ~*~ Nancy Ness

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-03-17 12:20 PM

Let's see, I know of one challenge...you'll have to fill me in on the second...

but nevertheless, a delight to greet me this day...thank you so much, my friend, you provide an awesome example of how to do things write!

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

2 posted 2002-03-17 01:25 PM

WOW Nan you've met my challenge quite well and then in Pantoumform

Enjoyed the read

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Munda
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since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

3 posted 2002-03-21 03:48 PM

Sigh... as always superb Nan!

Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

4 posted 2002-03-21 06:04 PM

Aha, these lovely ladies are absolutely right again. This is just superb. I can almost smell the salt and feel the breeze.

Thanks,
Pete

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