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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Let not too swiftly fade away this glow, adrift within the current flow, we two. Set course along familiar routes, and so, let not too swiftly fade away this glow. Here in each others' arms we've come to know desire shall be rekindled, all anew. Let not too swiftly fade away this glow, adrift within the current flow, we two. |
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cwebb Junior Member
since 2002-01-19
Posts 34 |
"adrift within the current flow, we two" - this is lovely. I think you've succeeded with this - not only does it fit the scheme, it builds a mood - not only does it convey a sensual surround, but also reminds us of our own drifting times... Carol |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Good job, Doc! A very nice triolet from my POV. Mike |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Carol, Thank you. Something I remembered from an earlier course. When you are working within a limited format that has the added requirement of repetition, you should not only chose strong enough lines that will withstand repeating, but will also re-inforce the theme. Doc Mike, Thank you, Sir. At first I thought this rhymed with Chevrolet! Good thing Munda straightened me out on that. This is an interesting form, someone said it's like a puzzle (but then again , most things are, to me). Doc |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Another good one Doc. Ok, you've got 2 already and I am yet to produce the first. Pete |
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Lady in Red Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 147 |
Oh my goodness Doc... SHE said that to you? Hmm I'd say let her write one first.  For what's it's worth Doc... I love it!  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Me too.. Me too.. Me too - This is great, Doc..  ...and watch out for that Lady in Red... Who let her into this class anyway? Munda, I thought you were guarding the door..  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Pete, Where are my manners of late? All you nice people reply and I just can't seem to keep up.Thank you! Doc My Dear Lady, As you have also honored me with a reply, I am now in your service if you should wish to resurrect our former "stute" friends, and I do heartily thank thee for your kind words. Doc Nan, Do I detect a note of repetition here? Please, you must explain the "me too" format. I don't think i've run across this one before.Thanks. Doc |
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