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Titia Geertman
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0 posted 2002-01-27 10:23 AM



I'll try one more before this month will end,
to see if I will get it right this time.
I always struggle, for my lines will bend,
while pondering I am, about good rhyme.

I have to think about the meter flow.
It rhymes a - b - a - b, c - d - c - d,
e - f - e - f, two g's at end of row.
I'm going mad, I think, so pity me.

And that's not all, you have to think of theme
It has to be a problem of some kind
It's really sad and even roams my dream
I have to find solutions in my mind

I'm nearly finished, just one line to write
I hope my theme, my lines and rhyme flow tight



A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Want to use the pics on my website? Just send me a mail and I'll give you the link.




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Balladeer
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1 posted 2002-01-28 09:29 AM


They flow as tight as an archer's bowstrings, Titia! This is wonderful...not one syllable out of place, the meter is perfection, and I cannot find the smallest thing wrong to say about it...very loud applause here!!!
Not A Poet
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2 posted 2002-01-28 10:33 AM


Aha, what Balladeer said.

Pete

[This message has been edited by Not A Poet (01-28-2002 10:33 AM).]

Titia Geertman
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3 posted 2002-01-28 12:33 PM




I DID IT?????
I DID IT!!!!!
FINALLY


Thank you guys for all the teaching and support.

I can write sonnets, Yoepieeeeeeee!!!!

Titia


A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Want to use the pics on my website? Just send me a mail and I'll give you the link.


[This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (01-28-2002 12:35 PM).]

Denise
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4 posted 2002-01-28 03:16 PM


You certainly did, Titia! And with a dash of humor too! Love it!
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5 posted 2002-01-28 09:50 PM


Titia~
You ROCK !!!!!!
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Munda
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6 posted 2002-01-29 12:08 PM


Yes you did it Titia!
amigo
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7 posted 2002-01-29 12:28 PM


Oh, dear, you go girl!!! Mastered the art,...cool,....i'm so happy for you...waiting for you in the playground....
Tracey
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8 posted 2002-01-29 10:03 PM


Great job Titia!! I'm impressed. I wish I could figure out how to do these...oh well, I will take my F, and try again next month!! Lol

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Nan
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9 posted 2002-02-08 01:23 PM


You DID, indeed...

Now about the TRIOLET...

Titia Geertman
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10 posted 2002-02-09 07:01 PM


*Sigh* Triolets, when I first saw that word I thought 'trio' is writing with tree, but later it apeared I have to write them all by myself *sigh*.

I'll try, no apples on the trees yet teach.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Want to use the pics on my website? Just send me a mail and I'll give you the link.

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