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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
"Becoming One Where Once Were Two" As we lay together in the night Side by side, you and I, With your soft, moist, pink, luscious lips slowly tempting me, Sparkled droplets in your hair, glisten with the scent of you? Soft prelude to love affair. Come to me, come to me, into the night. Take my love and hold me tight. Let me fill your heart?s desire With this torch I bare; this burning fire, Feel my passion, feel my flame; Say you love me, say my name. Slowly moving in and out Between the moment and surreal, Taking but brief interlude Before the coming of the dream. Then begin the quickening; hearts beating in simpatico When I looked into your eyes, and fell into your soul; Two hearts, one mind, Caught in rapture, bodies so entwined, Like Mobius, a loop, with no end in mind. Bodies in motion, Heaving, Thrusting, Undulating pendulum, swinging in time, River of emotion, Seething, Flowing, Osculating rhythm, exploding in rhyme. ...and at the very moment, earth erupts, mountains soar; Oceans crashing ?gainst the shore, We come together in ascending glory, Bursting through obscuring shrouds, To float upon ethereal clouds. Then, like snow on fluff of winter?s pillow; flitter soft down, Lightly, Gently, Caressed, Locked in love?s embrace, Endlessly, Endlessly, Slowly spiraling down. Feeling a little faint, I quiver and shake While Holding your face in my hands like a gift from Aphrodite, Back-lit moonbeams halo your hair As it softly changes hue, And lost in a momentary bliss, I thus become of you, And we become of this: Lines now blurred between pain and pleasure; love and woe? distorted, time stands still...or speeds up, I don?t know, But I?m swept away, lost in you, And you become all of me, Becoming one, where once were two. ---- Gene (formerly, u_gene) |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
errr...maybe I shouldn't have read yours before posting mine! LOL! I don't think I can follow something like this.  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Phew Gene, what a dizzying passuionate ride. Wow! write on Kethry. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I think Nan will send you to the Principal this time.  You know I love this poem, although I love the original version even more.  |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Temptress -- Thanks, but I have to admit, I've been luking around in another forum here. After reading some of your poems, I felt the urge to get very amorous. I wanted to post this as I originally wrote it, but I think it would have been X-rated. Kethry -- Thanks, I'll definitely do more. I've had a very good reason to be inspired lately. Munda -- The Principal? I'm getting off easy. You know if I posted the original, Nan would have had me expelled.  Gene (formerly, u_gene) [This message has been edited by Gene (edited 02-14-2001).] |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
This is so passionate! I felt like I might be intruding! Wonderful writing! ( I think I'll give my husband a call now) Debbie |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Um... Yeah - well - I think I remember seeing some literary imagery in there - yeah - I'm sure it was there... Which lines were those, anyway??... something about "like Aphrodite"... wasn't it?....Going back to re-read now... um.. Principal?? I think this is "Superintendant" material...  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Gene , Darn you ! I was going to try to quit smoking after reading Doreen's stuff , and now this ! Oh well ( lightin' up here boss ). Doc |
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