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Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2001-01-20 08:53 PM


Nan,
my daughter challenged me to write in a new style in which the last word of the line rhymes with the first word.
I have completed one poem(see below) but have no idea of what it's called and whether I am doing it correctly. If anyone knows it's you, so I am posting it here in the hope you or anyone else can help!

Pollution!
Care for the air
or
Choke on the smoke

Protect from neglect
and
Empower the flower

Shake out the lake
to
Cease rain's decrease

Pollute not the newt
no
Slaughter in water

Rescind all bad wind
then
Breeze through the trees

Amass more green grass
to
Air make more fair

Land keep in hand
and
Till if you will

Rust turn to dust
to
Care for the air





Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



© Copyright 2001 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
Munda
Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
1 posted 2001-01-21 05:27 AM


I have no idea what this is called, but it's very creative and I'm sure liking it. Yes I am.  
Suzanne Arlene
Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2001-01-21 10:21 AM


I liked that alot. It as intersting style and it made a whole lot of sense to me.Might try one myself   Suzanne
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2001-01-21 10:35 PM


Munda and Suzanne,
thanks for stopping by. I'm glad you both like it. Now if i could just figure out what it's called I'd be a happy chappy.

write on
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Marsha
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England
4 posted 2001-01-22 12:37 PM


Kethry love, this is wonderful and your challenge to me is ghastley, horrendous, how, how, how, am I, I'll be dead in less than a week now for sure.
Oh my aching brain, they'll find me knocking on the doors to go back to work, I can cruise it there. (And you know I'm going to don't you, I just like you to hear me moan and mutter)
Marsha exit stage right, muttering about perfidious friends.
                  
Take care you challenger you!

                 Slushy
                    


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
5 posted 2001-01-22 03:01 PM


Marsha,
I'll let you off doing it if you can tell me what the style's called. (yes love I know you've already done it!)It was  hardly a stretch at all.
Keth


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
6 posted 2001-01-28 08:15 AM


This is a sound device that's used by lots of poets - primarily in children's verse - though I'm not aware of an actual name for it...

Repitition of vowel sounds within a line is called Assonance, but I'm not sure it there's a more specific description... If I find it, I'll let you know..

Romy
Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida
7 posted 2001-01-28 11:28 AM


The closest that I have come to finding out about this type of rhyme is that it is considered a "counting rhyme" a rhyme scheme that was used for teaching children.

like;

One, Two, buckle my shoe
Three, four, shut the door.

Couldn't find a specific name other than that, but it sure has made me curious!  I like it too and I'm going to write one!

Thanks for the challenge!


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