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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2000-12-22 10:55 PM


When time is short one must think quick
for me to get a passing grade
fore-gone all of the "normal" schtick
a proper poem just must be made

For me to get a passing grade
of words I use like building bricks
a proper poem just must be made
which like two clocks has twice the ticks

Of words I use like building bricks
I think that rhymes with marmalades
which like two clocks has twice the ticks
and once again I've been betrayed

I think that rhymes with marmalades
so often play these little tricks
and once again I've been betrayed
by house of cards I thought was slick

So often play these little tricks
I've left it all quite dis-arrayed
by house of cards I thought was slick
a king trumped by the ace of spades

I've left it all quite dis-arrayed
fore-gone all of the "normal" schtick
a king trumped by the ace of spades
when time is short one must think quick



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Munda
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1 posted 2000-12-23 04:05 AM


Pretty darn good Doc, pretty darn good ! I think you've come to the point where you can teach ME !     And as far as I know anything about meter...this looks like perfect iambic pentameter to me, but I'll leave that up to Nan though... hehe...
By the way... what does "schtick" mean and where does it come from ? I couldn't find that word in any of my dictionaries, not even my Dutch one.    



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Dr.Moose1
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2 posted 2000-12-23 08:24 AM


Munda ,
Thanks for all the coaching ."Schtick" as far as I can figure is a slang term for
a comedy act . Not quite sure of it's origins other than that .Hope you have a great holiday season . I'll be back with part two . Thanks again .
Doc

Nan
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3 posted 2000-12-30 08:52 AM


We'll all be learning Moose calls here - Doc, you've definitely mastered the rules sufficiently to break them properly... That, after all, was the goal, was it not???...
Dr.Moose1
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4 posted 2000-12-31 12:02 PM


Nan ,
You are correct as usual ( that's why you're the "Teach' ). I wonder if for New Years , if I were to resolve to follow the rules , how long that resolution would last ? Wishing all the best in the up-coming year and beyond .
Doc

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