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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Snickering Witch A sleepy night of halloween A sleepy night of halloween The darkest sight in wistful dream The darkest sight in wistful dream A wistful sight in sleepy dream The darkest night of halloween In sightless dark a flickering twitch In sightless dark a flickering twitch Ignites the spark of snickering witch Ignites the spark of snickering witch A sightless witch of snickering twitch In flickering spark ignites the dark Halloween’s most delicious bite Halloween’s most delicious bite Explodes in witch’s vicious fright Explodes in witch’s vicious fright Halloween’s most delicious fright Explodes in witch’s vicious bite In sleepy dream in a wistful twitch Of Halloween’s most vicious witch Witch's delicious bite ignites The Halloween snickering fright In darkest dark of sightless sight A flickering spark explodes the night Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 10-26-2000).] |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
E.Santos, I would have expected nothing less than this from you , another wonderfully crafted piece. And a very merry boo to you ! Doc |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks,I found this to be more challenging than a villanelle, especially the last stanza. Yours are fantastic Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hi, LizzieLady~ A difficult endeavor, huh ? You've done really well in this attempt. One teensy word missing in your third stanza ... in your wrap-up line. 'Most' is missing. And the last stanza has 33 words yet your usable lines have 32 ... I can't pinpoint the extra word but ... I'm sure you'll find it. This form IS challenging ! And I love your theme and rhyme. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I finally found the flickering glitch And snitched a twitch from the snickering witch Thanks Marge, all straightened out now |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lizzie~ It's like looking for a witch in a haystack, huh ? Way to go gal ! Love seeing you rise to the challenge. *Snickering* here ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
All righty then - The reason I back off a bit after the initial assignment is to give you guys a chance to dissect each other's work - and lookee what happens... You come up with perfection...   |
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