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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
I had a little setback a couple of days ago so still don't get much computer time. Sorry, Nan, I won't be able to participate like I should in this session. I have at least looked at some of the outstanding efforts but won't be able to comment for another week or two. Well, enough of this, here is my assignment for "Sonnets". Beginning To End The ravages of Time will take their toll While all are helpless, milling to-and-fro With fragile minds and dreams they may be whole; Their drab and lifeless days . . . they cannot know. They're draped in silks of colors, grand and bold But stained with blood and tears from countless years Of hopeless games and pointless goals they're told Will smooth their lives and soothe their senseless fears. And don't think from these throes you are exempt Or hope some turn may let you win this game; Despite audacious schemes you may attempt, The final, gruesome outcome is the same. So make your noise but find your peace, my friend; The score's foregone, beginning to the end. Miss you all very much, Pete Pete What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity -- sufficiently sublime in their simplicity -- for the mere enunciation of my theme? Edgar Allan Poe |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Pete, I'm sure I speak for everyone when I say we miss you very much, and wish you a very speedy recovery. Your sonnet was extremely well-written, but I detected something I've never seen from you. I think you need some cheering up. So I wrote the following: (and it can count as extra credit...I bet I'll get a good grade in this class!)  When struggles wear us down, they oft can pull, Us to our knees, our sails without the wind, Into depression we may sink, so full, Of hopelessness, we forget how to grin. Oh, Pete, we hope sincerely that you're strong, And this experience will render you A new belief in yourself, in your songs, So much you have to share, much more to do, There's spitballs yet to sail across the room, And pranks to play on Jim and Poertree, The CA needs your expertise, illume, This tiny sliver, life, in P I P. Please, smile when you recall us here, dear Pete,  As we await your full return so "Sweet". Take the best of care, Kris   P.S. It won't be long, and the whole experience will be just a dim and distant place in your memory. < !signature--> the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare [This message has been edited by warmhrt (edited 05-12-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Pete, A sad sonnet well written. I see from Kris's remarks that you are ill.I wish you a speedy recovery, dear poet, and hope that your pen doesn't stop, though you may not get to the keyboard. You can always write on a notebook, but in the age of keyboards, have you noticed how difficult it is to "write" poetry on paper, crossing out and rewriting? It's like adding without a calculator - just can't do it.(Except for Nan) My best wishes for your recovery. Liz |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Live each day to its fullest, say ye?... This may be a sad sonnet, but it's full of wisdom. You're absolutely right - None of has any guarantees... Technically, you're right on the mark - You knew that, of course... Your Shakespearean rhyme scheme and meter are intact... Your theme is well done... but feel better, OK???  |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Kris, Elizabeth and Nan, Thank you so much for your best wishes. Actually I'm doing pretty good and hope to be back to full steam in another week or two. I must apologize for the sad feeling to this poem. Actually, I didn't mean it to sound so much that way. And, it truly does not reflect my feelings. It is just a poem, something done rather quickly to finish this class Well, hope to be back with you soon. I sometimes miss those spitballs and thumbtacks and such. BTW, haven't seen much of those rogues Jim and Philip lately. Wonder what happened to them? Love ya, Pete |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Pete: I'll take a closer look at this one later but at a glance I like it. Where have I been? My company is opening a hotel next month and I am on the project management team, I've been battling (and beating) my son's school district over his education plan, and I'm working on getting an autism advocacy group going in my home town. I will be back to full speed soon. I promise. Jim [This message has been edited by jbouder (edited 05-15-2000).] |
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