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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Naannnn!! I can't seem to get this one right.  All the da dums and meters and iambics and stuff are swirling round my head and not making a lot of sense! HEELLLPPPP! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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StarrGazer Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679Texas |
ESP rest assured you are not the only person having problems if you look in the threads my attempt at sonnet gene seemed to do a pretty good job of explaining the daDUMs but while I can comprehend it while looking at what he has written when I try to apply it to my writing I get lost !!maybe what he wrote in response to my attempt will help you understand a little more... Basically, try to have 10 syllables per line. your first line has 11. This is not always the case though. Sometimes you might want to set the meter so that it's more pleasing to the ear. For example: I always have trouble with the word 'memories' It's three syllables (DUM da DUM), but it sounds awkward as three syllables and to my ear, really thows a sonnet off. Most people pronounce it like two, 'memries' (DUM da) Here's an example below, which sounds better to you? (In the first line below, if you pronounce 'memories' as two syllables, which most people would, then it doesn't flow. Although, the meter and syllable count are perfect, it doesn't sound good and trying to pronounce it as three syllables really sounds awkward--even though it's correct. In the second line, if you pronounce 'memories' as two syllables, then it flows--all I did was add the word 'the' Technically, it's wrong according to the syllable count, but it sounds better and if you consider 'memories' two syllables, then it does work out as 10 syllables). My memories taste sweetest served with love. My memories tase the sweetest served with love. --- this was part of his response hope it helps you a little  [This message has been edited by StarrGazer (edited 05-10-2000).] |
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wonderous Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 75 |
hi ESP i am sailing in the same boat. all this rhyming is really confusing and gene@s comments even scarier cause i dont even have the same accent as you guys |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey you guys - No fair sitting in the back of the class so I don't notice you...  It only seems really hard... give us something to work with - a starting point - Then we can make some adjustments on your work - Be brave - It only hurts for a little while... |
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