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For my friend... |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
I know things are bad Don't be sad I know it can be rough Please be tough Don't frown Write your thoughts down Maybe in a letter Don't worry it'll get better Try eating some junk food It might put you in a better mood Go for a walk And maybe a little talk Just know that I'm there for you And that I love you too Put on a smile As long as a mile |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
now i know ive felt the way this poem does before, its like the one person you love is either in a bad mood or had something going on in their lives or theyre mad at you, but theres nothing you can do about it but say i love you and hope that they pull through it. this poem is a little short, but still strong and gets the point across, i also like the rythem sceme, simple yet still, gets the point across. i cant think of anything that i would change in this poem! keep writing! always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :) |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Overall, I enjoyed reading the poem. The part that struck me most was the realism in it. You used real parts of life and things people do to create the scenes. It was, on the other hand, lacking a little bit of vocabulary usage or other uses of words that can create more emotions. Keep em comin and I'll keep reading. Jeremy D. Halstead |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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~frustrated writer~ Member
since 2008-02-25
Posts 84 |
your poem's great!. fantastic! =) **LiRa** |
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Aditi New Member
since 2008-06-06
Posts 3 |
A cute and a nice one. Short and sweet. I personally liked it |
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