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For my friend...

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Nikkisweet
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since 02-14-2000
Posts 184
Tx, Dallas


0 posted 06-10-2000 09:01 PM       View Profile for Nikkisweet   Email Nikkisweet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Nikkisweet


I know things are bad
Don't be sad
I know it can be rough
Please be tough

Don't frown
Write your thoughts down
Maybe in a letter
Don't worry it'll get better

Try eating some junk food
It might put you in a better mood
Go for a walk
And maybe a little talk

Just know that I'm there for you
And that I love you too
Put on a smile
As long as a mile
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CLBinLOVE
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since 06-04-2000
Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA


1 posted 06-12-2000 04:02 PM       View Profile for CLBinLOVE   Email CLBinLOVE   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CLBinLOVE

now i know ive felt the way this poem does before, its like the one person you love is either in a bad mood or had something going on in their lives or theyre mad at you, but theres nothing you can do about it but say i love you and hope that they pull through it.  
this poem is a little short, but still strong and gets the point across, i also like the rythem sceme, simple yet still, gets the point across.  i cant think of anything that i would change in this poem! keep writing!

 always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :)
Jeremy Halstead
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since 06-01-2000
Posts 572
Morris, Ill. U.S.A


2 posted 06-13-2000 03:39 AM       View Profile for Jeremy Halstead   Email Jeremy Halstead   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeremy Halstead

Overall, I enjoyed reading the poem.  The part that struck me most was the realism in it.  You used real parts of life and things people do to create the scenes.  It was, on the other hand, lacking a little bit of vocabulary usage or other uses of words that can create more emotions.  Keep em comin and I'll keep reading.

Jeremy D. Halstead

 
Artic Wind
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since 09-16-2007
Posts 8075
Realm of Supernatural


3 posted 11-15-2007 07:25 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
~frustrated writer~
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since 02-25-2008
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4 posted 02-28-2008 10:14 AM       View Profile for ~frustrated writer~   Email ~frustrated writer~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~frustrated writer~

your poem's great!.
fantastic! =)

**LiRa**

Aditi
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since 06-06-2008
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5 posted 06-06-2008 06:54 AM       View Profile for Aditi   Email Aditi   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Aditi

A cute and a nice one. Short and sweet.
I personally liked it
 
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