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Lani_DarkOne
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since 05-28-2000
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UK


0 posted 06-08-2000 05:20 PM       View Profile for Lani_DarkOne   Email Lani_DarkOne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lani_DarkOne


** I tend to hide behind metaphors...i hide alot when i think about it. Anyway, I think this is one of the most fogged up poem, but also it's very clear (i don't know what i'm going on about). I'm just saying that I think it's very hard for someone (other than me) to understand this; so I'll appreaciate all replies.

Flowery  elaborate words,
Fails to grip the brush
Slips unnoticed across my
Conscience.
Dissipating into mist
Evaporating under your wrath,
Passion
Remorse.
Stripped bare
Curl
Hide
Small as I can.
Distant echoes of unnerving mystical
Chimes of lapping waves
Appear as sacred and legendary
As heaven.
Tears turn to stone
Conscience grows wings.
Fly away.
Pleading energy
Let free.

 "You could be my unintended
Choice, to live my life extended...." Muse

"Even when we're apart we'll still be under the same sky," LJ Smith

"Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive
She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs
Several forms scurry to seek shelter
Beneath her levitating shadow.
Her back rigid , eyes glassy
Gazes intently at time escaping
Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles
Through the hour glass,
A single tear grazes her misty cheek." Lani
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Lucius Cade
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since 03-23-2000
Posts 239
Saskatchewan


1 posted 06-09-2000 03:18 PM       View Profile for Lucius Cade   Email Lucius Cade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucius Cade

Wow, I really liked this. I know what you mean it was hard to understand. But I noticed each line had something different to say about you. Great poem

 Lucidity is the answer to all problems
TearsOfPearls
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since 09-23-1999
Posts 323
Vereeniging, South-Africa


2 posted 06-09-2000 03:47 PM       View Profile for TearsOfPearls   Email TearsOfPearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TearsOfPearls

Wow! IT's great, no wait...it's fantastic!

"Distant echoes of unnerving mystical
Chimes of lapping waves
Appear as sacred and legendary
As heaven."

My favourite part of the poem, and I think I understand it. But I think, to every person, it will mean something else.

Wonderful poem!!


 Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.
Matchstick McGee
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since 05-15-2000
Posts 26
Austin, Texas


3 posted 06-10-2000 08:49 PM       View Profile for Matchstick McGee   Email Matchstick McGee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Matchstick McGee

I don't know whether or not I necessarily understood what it said about you, but the point, at least for me, is the way that it speaks to me. I tend to hide too, and this poem relates to me and describes my life in a way that few do. I will remember this one, please keep writing!

     -Matchstick
Artic Wind
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since 09-16-2007
Posts 8075
Realm of Supernatural


4 posted 11-15-2007 07:23 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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