This has beautiful imagery. It's very interesting, as the meaning doesn't jump out at the reader and when you read it over and over again, all these emotions come out...I find it really sad and longing.
I just read it again..wow. 'Great' doesn't describe it...it's so deep. I could write an essay on this, maybe it's because I'm so into the sky, sea and nature and I feel exactly as the last verse does.
Sorry for rambling!
Keep on writing, I'm looking forward to see more of your work!!!
"You could be my unintended
Choice, to live my life extended...." Muse
"Even when we're apart we'll still be under the same sky," LJ Smith
"Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive
She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs
Several forms scurry to seek shelter
Beneath her levitating shadow.
Her back rigid , eyes glassy
Gazes intently at time escaping
Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles
Through the hour glass,
A single tear grazes her misty cheek." Lani