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Teen Poetry #2

Fallen Angel

Dean
Member

since 1999-11-23

Posts 120
Canada

0 posted 2000-06-06 04:18 PM

Fallen Angel

The face of a fallen angel,
her breath has become quite still.
Tears flow from her face,
sick of lifes unbearable taste.
A world not ment for the innocent,
a world that is all to ignorant.
She slips away into a world blanketed with peace,
now she can be relieved,
she is deceased.

"Live to love or why live at all"
Deano :)

CLBinLOVE
Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA

1 posted 2000-06-06 05:36 PM

i like it, short, yet alot of feeling, gets to the point, gets you into the feeling of it, and then its done
very nice

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

2 posted 2000-06-06 06:01 PM

I love the way you use so much passion in your words. sounds to me like you chose them carefully! Job well done!! Congradulations! Keep it up!! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~

Alwye

Moderator

Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

3 posted 2000-06-06 11:17 PM

Very powerful with great imagery! Good job, keep it up!

*Krista Knutson*

"Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~

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