How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Teen Poetry #2 Archive
 Fade to Black
 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Fade to Black

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Brom
Junior Member
since 06-06-2000
[First Post] 16


0 posted 06-06-2000 04:05 AM       View Profile for Brom   Email Brom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brom

Fade to Black

I got a bottle of vodka.
Helping me drown my sorrow.
I just don't care anymore.
If I live to see tomorrow.

All of life’s pressures.
Are starting to take their toll.
Just can't seem to get a grip.
I feel I am losing my control.

I can feel myself falling.
Into what seems like a bottomless pit.
No matter how hard I try.
There seems no way out of it.

Makes no difference what I do or say.
I just can't seem to win.
Maybe I should face the facts.
And just give in.

So I guess this my last goodbye.
I have reached the point of no turning back.
The end has finally arrived.
Fade to black.

© Copyright 2000 Adam Portman - All Rights Reserved
Isabelle
Member
since 08-25-99
Posts 176
Indiana


1 posted 06-06-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for Isabelle   Email Isabelle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabelle

I can really relate to this poem. I know the feeling. Things do get better. Just hang in there. Good poetry though keep it up and welcome to passions.

Love,
Jeanna

 "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~

mickel2995
Junior Member
since 05-24-2000
Posts 48


2 posted 06-07-2000 12:48 AM       View Profile for mickel2995   Email mickel2995   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mickel2995

Welcome to Passions, I find your poetry quite amusing and wonderful. I think your a great writer, keep 'em coming!!  god job, Micale
ILoveSrfrs
Member
since 11-14-1999
Posts 68
California


3 posted 06-07-2000 01:42 AM       View Profile for ILoveSrfrs   Email ILoveSrfrs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ILoveSrfrs

Hey, Welcome to passions. I really liked this one. I think everyone can relate to this one in their own way. Especially loved the last line, like an ending to a movie. Great work, keep writing!
marissa
DragonFang
Senior Member
since 03-09-2000
Posts 525
Missouri, USA


4 posted 06-07-2000 01:56 AM       View Profile for DragonFang   Email DragonFang   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DragonFang's Home Page   View IP for DragonFang

First off, welcome to passions, please enjoy your stay. Now, I'd like to say that that is a beautifuly constructed poem, and very nicely written. It however is very sad, keep a stiff upper lip, I know from experience, things get better.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice
From what I've tasted of desire,
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great,
And would suffice.
-Robert Frost
Brom
Junior Member
since 06-06-2000
Posts 16


5 posted 06-07-2000 06:31 PM       View Profile for Brom   Email Brom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brom

Thanks guys, I just lost my Grandmother and i wrote this like 10 minutes after i heard. I feel alot better now though :P
I like writing about funny things, so watch for em (Gremlins)  

 Love will be the end of us...
Jeffyf
Junior Member
since 05-28-2000
Posts 48
Muncie, IN


6 posted 06-08-2000 03:32 AM       View Profile for Jeffyf   Email Jeffyf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffyf

I lost my grandmother about a year ago.  It was hard, but it did make me realize one thing:  life is short.  Look forward to tomorrow, but don't forget today.  Remember the past, but don't live in it.  I'm sure you'll do fine, and I look forward to the funny poems.  Keep writing, your work is great.
Jeff
Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 05-26-99
Posts 25869
Hurricane Alley


7 posted 06-10-2000 05:48 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to the family! This is very good. I'm so sorry about your grandmother. I do look forward to reading the gremlins too! Please check your email for a special message.  
StarPryncess17
Senior Member
since 05-31-2000
Posts 944
Colorado


8 posted 06-10-2000 10:37 PM       View Profile for StarPryncess17   Email StarPryncess17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit StarPryncess17's Home Page   View IP for StarPryncess17

WELCOME to the family!! I hope you enjoy Passions! well, I'm very sorry about your grandma ... about 3 weeks ago, I lost my last grandparent.   but I agree with everyone else it does get better! This poem is very unique and I'm sure conveys a deeper feeling than what is prtrayed. Nice writinf=g! oh yes, and I must comment on Gremlins! Nicely written! I agree!!!! Just remember that I live with an Alien! j/k! keep up the intriguing writing! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

 "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves."
"Bleeding hearts release tears of fire"
"work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last"
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 09-16-2007
Posts 8075
Realm of Supernatural


9 posted 11-15-2007 07:23 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
Brom will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Teen Poetry #2 >> Fade to Black Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors