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StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
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0 posted 2000-06-05 06:01 PM


Do you think that you are srtonger?
I laugh at your thoughts to conquer!
You did this once before
But together we are more
You can try but you won't succeed
Just go back to smoking your weed
All you did all the time was lie
You hurt us both and made us cry
You broke my girlie's heart
I know you had that goal from the start
I have news for you - our friendship is stronger
You can't come between us any longer
We're best friends til the end
no matter what you do our friendship will always mend
Your futile efforts are useless now
Just give up you don't know how
Together we are stronger
You can't come between us any longer!

*~*~As you all can see this is about someone coming between my best friend and I. but now we learned and won't stand for it any more! I LOVE YOU MICALE!!*~*~

© Copyright 2000 Jessica Lynn - All Rights Reserved
Lucius Cade
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since 2000-03-23
Posts 235
Saskatchewan
1 posted 2000-06-05 07:52 PM


Very well written.

Do you think that you are srtonger?
I laugh at your thoughts to conquer!

You seem confident in your relationship with your friend. Great poem


 Lucidity is the answer to all problems

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
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Colorado
2 posted 2000-06-05 07:56 PM


Lucius!thanks for the reply. this poem is about one very special person very dear to my heart...my best friend. I would do anything for that girl and when he came between us he ripped our relationship into little pieces, but as everyone says, true friendship will last through the long haul. well it did and Micale and I are closer than ever!! =0) thanks for your reply! Love Always ~*~Jessica Lynn~*~
ILoveSrfrs
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since 1999-11-14
Posts 69
California
3 posted 2000-06-05 08:00 PM


I agree, this is a very well-written and sweet poem. Has your best friend read it?
StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
4 posted 2000-06-05 08:21 PM


Marissa~
thanks for the reply. It means a lot to hear that my poem is well written coming from some one who write so beautifully!!! thxs! umm...actaully, she hasn't read it. I read it to her but not all of it. She hasn't been on today so I'm sure she'll have the chance to read it later on. We always read eacht other's work. that's where we get the most inspiration I think! Thxs for the kind words!! Love Always ~*~Jessica Lynn~*~

mickel2995
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since 2000-05-24
Posts 48

5 posted 2000-06-05 11:12 PM


Well i msut tell you this is one of my favorite poems Jess!!!  It means so much to me for you to still be standing by my side after what he (nick) has put me and our relationship thruogh.  I think it's great and as friends we are closer than ever, but this time Jess, I promise he's gone!!  Thanks all for reading the poems, and thanks to you jess!! Love ya Micale
Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
6 posted 2000-06-06 03:42 AM


Hey, great job with the use of attitude.  I could really pick up on the bitter/smart-assed attitude in this.  The way you organized your words and the one you used conveyed the attitude well.  keep em' comin'

Jeremy

 

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
7 posted 2000-06-06 05:58 PM


Thanks for your replies guys!! =0)

Micale~You know I lvoe you!!! I'm glad you like this poem because it is for you...well Nick, but you get the point! thxs for reading!! SISTERS-4-LIFE!!!!!

Jeremy~oh so now I have an attitude?!? Oh wait, I'm a smart ass too?!!? LoL j/k!!!! I am a smart ass and I take pride in it! Thxs for ALL of your replies they mean a lot to me! =0) Keep writing! I can't wait to read your next one!! =0)

Love you ALL!!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

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